baby
these seven deadly sins
are floating through my veins
so smother me with your
[envy]
darling;;
it only makes
this conquest
.better.
you can headbutt with my [pride]
all
you
want
//but it wont budge//
because ill be keeping up with my [gluttinous] ways
while i consume your boy.friend and his non-[slothy] ways.
.B.o.y.
[greed] is why i took you back
&& [lust] is what keeps you
in my bed.
so piss me off and this
[wrath] will be endless
Author notes
i picked option #2
(i read the rules)
hey dollies;;
hows this for deadly??
♥
Second contest-
wifey its me [Crash Into Me]
A contest entry
- 7 Deadly sins by shattered logic.
505 points, ended March 16, 2007, 34 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
girly's you like??
Comments
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wonderful piece well worthy
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Congrats on bronze the top 3 were all great, it was a hard choice but your piece is still very well written, def capable of a gold again great write i loved ur piece Thanks for entering!!!
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thanks so much sweet ♥
i loved your idea for the contest very lovely-making.
-alexsis
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.B.o.y.
[greed] is why i took you back
&& [lust] is what keeps you
in my bed.
so piss me off and this
[wrath] will be endless
darling your so talented
&& amazing. i'm in love with you
=] ♥
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Well done, I like how you played out all seven sins, It has it's own unique flow to it.--
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//but it wont budge//
because ill be keeping up with my [gluttinous] ways
while i consume your boy.friend and his non-[slothy] ways.
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Thats my favorite part of your write. Over all it was well put together, and you portrayed all seven sins very well. again good job and good luck!!!!!! -
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thanks sweetie;;
aww..
hehe thanks for commenting i know you're probably extremely busy..but it made my day.
♥
-alexsis
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definitely deadly, definitely great. lalalove this muchly.
.B.o.y.
[greed] is why i took you back
&& [lust] is what keeps you
in my bed.
so piss me off and this
[wrath] will be endless
great job and good luck in your contest. -
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hehe
comment whore!!
i love it..
keep giving me my fix..
id die without you.
♥
-alexsis
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Another well done peice of poetry and another nice read. I really like looking at work. Keep it up there.
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thanks sweet ♥
-alexsis
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" [greed] is why i took you back
&& [lust] is what keeps you
in my bed."
Oooh darling!
You are venomous. && I love absolutely everything about you hun♥
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i love you
heh..
venomous.
heh..
iadore you.
♥
-your wife
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ohh, I love this!!!! I love the seven deadly sins!! amazing!!! I bet this will win in this contest! great job bbdoll!!
my favorite part is
"//but it wont budge//
because ill be keeping up with my [gluttinous] ways
while i consume your boy.friend and his non-[slothy] ways."
Amazing!
=P
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aww thanks suugar dolly.
♥
-alexsis
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I love the ending:
"&& [lust] is what keeps you
in my bed.
so piss me off and this
[wrath] will be endless"
--it's great. I love how you used the sins ... talented beauty you.
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youre my comment queen dolly face.
♥
-alexsis
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