[Verse 1]
What's it gonna take to try to win your heart?
Do I have to win first place, tell me where do I start?
maybe if I passed a test or jumped off ten feet,
you could see that I'm alive and fall in love with me.
Or maybe if dressed in nothing but jet black,
make some scars on my wrist, would you give me respect?
If I gave you a dozen roses about twice every week
would you blow me a kiss or leave me ready to weep?
[Chorus]
So take me love,
then leave me all alone.
Take a walk around my heart
and sit down on the throne.
So take my hand,
then leave my arms empty and see,
my love for you is just my own psychotic remedy.
[Verse 2]
Now what's it gonna take for you to give me a 'yes'?
Do I have to dance around for you, don't leave me to guess.
Maybe if I sat and talked to you and asked for a chance,
you could see that I'm really not all that bad.
Or maybe if I begged you to take me as your lover,
make some love notes for you, would you call my mother?
If I gave you my heart and let you call it your own,
would you drop it in some lighter fluid to watch it explode?
[Chorus]
So take my love,
then leave me all alone.
Take a walk around my heart
and sit down on the throne.
So take my hand,
then leave my arms empty and see,
my love for you is just my own psychotic remedy.
[Verse 3]
So tell me here and tell me now
will you be mines to own?
Will you take my lonely heart
and warm it with your own?
Would you stay with me all night long
and let me watch you while you sleep?
Or find me hiding under your bed
then kick me out on the street?!
[Chorus]
So take my love,
then leave me all alone.
Take a walk around my heart
and sit down on the throne.
So take my hand,
then leave my arms empty and see,
my love for you is my own psychotic remedy.
It's my psychotic remedy.
Open your heart and see,
you're the only thing I need.
Yeah, you're my psychotic remedy.
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i liked your lyrics. thanks for entering
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Hmm... I wasn't looking for any rhyme but in the option that specifically stated what kind of rhyme was allowed but ok...
I think this is a very literal piece, and I think it would do well for a few metaphors. You spell everything out to the reader, and I think that a lot of poetry (and music) is better if they do not lead the audience by the hand but let them have a bit of room to interpret.
Anyway, thank you for entering and best of luck
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The white images on the side with the white text make it hard to read
In line 11 the chorus is diferent from the rest and
In line 37 mines dhould not have a -s on the end.
Other than that it is great I love the last line of the chorus...
Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest...
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i think it would make for a good song but i dont think this is very dirty pretty to be honest but i do like it! thanx for entering & good luck!
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WOW!
Wow. Wow. Wow.
This is such a beautiful write!! Funny, satirical and a punch in the face of reality!
I had a nice laugh out of this one! I am a fan of satire. Believe me, I have never read such a wonderful piece before, either on AP or in any book!
I loved the chorus. It was just Fantastic! You made the whole piece into a laugh because it was funny and a realisation because truly, love is weird. Hmm, I don't know if that makes sense but that is how I interpreted this piece.
I have never read anything as wonderful as this. You have a great talent! Do keep witing! If I could applaud you ten times, I would but m allowed only three...but you definitely deserve so much more!!
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