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Memories Can Damage You!

With all the strife
And all the pain
She feels there's nothing
Left to gain

She sits in her room
And stares at the knife
Thinking about how much
She hates her life

She thinks about the pain
She's about to relieve
Her mouth sets in a grim line
She rolls up her sleeve

 

She makes the first cut

And lets out sighs

Already feeling better

From watching the crimson bubble arise

 

Memories flash through her mind

And she begins to cry

All the while wishing

She'll cut too deep and die

 

As she remembers those hurtful words

A second cut appears

"Go pop a few more, no one cares, die!"

She lets out an endless stream of tears

 

She slices and dices 

Up her wrists

And she clenches her hands

Into tightly closed fists

 

She stares at the blood

Finally feeling alive

But hates the feeling

And doesn't want to survive

 

So she cuts deeper and deeper

Covered in crimson tears

No longer caring about

How much the pain sears

 

She's mesmerized and staring

At the beautiful destruction

Feeling better with every second

Since she succumbed to the knife's seduction.

 

 

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Great Contest. This is about my past.

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  • DestiniesTwined
    February 13, 2008

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    This is so good I almost cried! I know that feeling so well, of never wanting to stop. Thank you so musch for writing this!!


  • SarahEatsAirplane
    June 22, 2007
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    OH MY THIS IS AMAZING.
    no wonder yopu won silver...


  • LaLaLie
    April 14, 2007
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    for my purpose: 9.5


  • LaLaLie
    April 11, 2007
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    Wow, looks like you really got what I am all about. Good write. Thanks for entering and good luck.


  • Electric Sunrise gold member
    April 7, 2007

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    Hits home hard

    i can relate to this on so many levels it's almost as if there's a part of me in this poem. Its as though you reach into your readers soul before they've even read the poem, and put something there for them to know and to bask in


  • hopelessly-broken
    March 26, 2007
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    i too can relate to this one. i liked the imegrey you used too. this was such a powerful poem.
    good luck in the contest i really liked this one, and think you shoudl win lol
    take care hun
    XoXoXoX


  • March 14, 2007
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    it is so true

    i can relate.


  • xBluexEyedxGirlx
    March 12, 2007
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    love it

    i can totally relate.
    its a really good poem.
    awesome job.


  • XneverXgoodXenoughX
    March 12, 2007
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    nice

    i can totally relate to this. very nice. look if you wanna talk, im always here


  • RazorbladeKissCasel
    March 11, 2007
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    O.o

    I love this poem...its really good


  • KeepingTime
    March 10, 2007
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    Yup.
    Its true.

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