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Resignation

 

 

 

Folds, crevices,

each carries a particle of sun-scorched reality,
greed... has crucified... bled dry,
resigned sighs from trembling lips.

Relentlessly, morning's orb
hides anonymously behind
a mantle of...
exotic shame.

Look attentively toward the morrow,
whence hopefully, comes expiation from...
man's grasping hands,

fingers trailing, loosening... poverty's chains.

Eyes close, tears flow the lash,
follow each crevice toward,

the chin lowered humbly,
in recognition of... resignation.

 

One foot in front of another
drawing no comfort from salty tears,
knowing each step is one less,
toward a tommorow that... belies belief.

 

 Limbs ache from grief
not such as death brings,
with its permanent sting,
but in the knowledge of... futile hope

 

 The heart still beats,
the mind searches out the kidneys,
blood still flows in shallow veins,
where will it all... end?

 

Where the passionate stand firm,
solace could still abide

as numerous grains build a mountain,
on which to build hope of... a new tomorrow

 

Lift your head up,
allow the folds to fall where they will
not all desert roses have thorns,
some cast a shadow... where comfort and safety lie therein

 

 

 

Author notes

I have chosen to write this free verse.

I notice it says the piece has 19 lines... it has in fact 36 lines, I do hope I am not disqualified for that particular error which is not of my doing.

This is an anonymous contest, please do not mention my name if you comment, I shall respond to any comments when the contest is over and judged.

Thank you

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  • duana
    April 4, 2007

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    Folds, crevices,

    each carries a particle of sun-scorched reality,

    These two lines are my absolute favorite, cause you just don't see people with such empathy towards others, as these lines show you obviously have. It is real hope for the future to know some young people have such character. This is an absolutely amazing poem. I hope you write for some poetry magazine with a social cause, sometime, cause this seems just like the kind of thing for it.


  • Touchof1der silver member
    March 11, 2007

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    To say I am simply spellbound and stunned by the sheer beauty of your words here is just too little. The adoration and admiration that I have for this piece is extensive. I can see where you have poured so much heart and soul into the imagery of your words and it leaves me breathless. This is a winner in my book.
    ♥ Touchof1der


  • TallDrinkofWater
    March 10, 2007
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    Excellent

    You did a wonderful job on this, I love the words anf how te poem grew, Write On Poet


  • artist pierce
    March 10, 2007
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    I am in awe of the tension that you created at the end of each verse. waiting for the verdict of each feeling. also a great look beyond what the picture presents on the surface. i am blown away once again by your imagined and projected insight.


  • Cannonsfire
    March 10, 2007
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    lol I can count , this is just exquisite and looks deep into the picture and behind the face of this young woman and see's Africa with some hope and some reservations, which I think she would have. It is a fine entry and thank you for entering it.


  • Sunshine Always
    March 10, 2007
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    What a beautifully sad and yet an amazing piece. The depth of feeling is formost in this sensitive write. The words portray such vivid imagery for the eyes and mind to absorb. Exceptional as always...mal

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