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Natures room

I've been in my own large room
but Natures room is larger

I envy it
but the things Nature has in her room are green with envy
so they must think me room is better

but still
when i look out
something in my chest
longs for it

but i don't know what it is
but it says that Nature's chamber
is better by far
but my domicile should be better, i reply

for i am all human kind

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  • travis34dietC
    March 11, 2007
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    slightly confusing but good overall. the 'but's bothered me.