Would you like a Cappuccino, my love?
I said to her after she awoke.
I never thought I could feel this way
Sitting across from you
At a coffee table,
Except when we take a walk to Old Town
Hand in hand
And laughing, teasing and flirting
With each other.
All my life
I felt like a flame searching for love.
Then I found you.
Love is like a fire that needs renewal
With tender caring as its fuel
And that’s when our flame began.
You were like a hot fire coming to my senses.
So bright and so beautiful
Who overtook me
With intrigue and mystery.
Oh, how I wanted you!
And how I feared
I couldn’t have you.
But slowly,
I started to crack your reserved ness
And my only concern
Is that I don’t disappoint you.
With you,
I feel like a Knight
Coming onto a virgin.
And there I found you beautiful
As if you were a dream.
You were like ripe sweetness of summer
Dripping with honey nectar
So tempting to taste
And I wanted
A tiny drop to touch my lips.
Because never before
Has anything tasted so good
As your raspberry lips.
My heart longs for the land that is not,
The land where all our dreams
Are wondrously fulfilled
I want to take you to the loveliest spot in this land
And caress you, and hold you, and smooth your hair
As you drink the warmth from my hand
And my every touch.
Now I live in a land that is all yours
And every time I dream of you
My sleep is so sweet.
How on earth
Did I ever live without you?
A contest entry
- Are there seriously no true poets here??? by whispernthedark.
585 points, ended June 19, 2007, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Thats what my love tells me ... thank you for writing that. -thank you-elena
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beautiful... cept for one thing...'coming onto a virgin'? that sounds kinda crass. i would def change the 'coming onto' seducing maybe? i dunno im no expert poet. lovely poem though and even stunning other than that line.
hugs,
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A virgin throughout history had a very high value. In this poem I am using this term as the highest value a man can find in a woman. This is not sex but a respect and honor.
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Beautiful work!!!!!!
With you,
I feel like a Knight
Coming onto a virgin.
And there I found you beautiful
As if you were a dream.
You were like ripe sweetness of summer
Dripping with honey nectar
So tempting to taste
And I wanted
A tiny drop to touch my lips.
Because never before
Has anything tasted so good
As your raspberry lips.
Does it get any sweeter than that? Wow! That's an amazing write, cram full with love and sensuality.
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Very pretty. Thank you so much for entering the contest. Good luck.
whisper
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Awesome!
You've obviously been inlove before. Beautiful poem!
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WOW!!!
Such a beautiful love poem, it genuinely made me weep. My favourite lines are:
Now I live in a land that is all yours
And every time I dream of you
My sleep is so sweet.
Such love must be wonderful. Julie.
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I think that everyday about my boyfriend. I think that we all need to find someone like that in our lifetime. I love that feeling and I think that you have a very nice way of expressing it.
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Romantic!
This is an exceptional love poem,modern yet the references to knights brings a renassaince feel.I love your raw energy, "You were like a hot fire to my senses, "..Oh how i wanted you.I also like your imagery with taste, "dripping with honey nectar."This is a very well written and composed poem ,thats static ,stylish and entertaining,thank you for sharing!
Melissa
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I like it. It feels like it came from the heart. I really like it and the sensery and imagery is really good
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a beautiful piece here with great raw emotion and metaphor,
perhaps try and make it in present tense. as you use the word were use are.
Tamara
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WOW
THAT REMINDES ME OF MANY YESTERYEARS
LEAVES ONE BREATHLESS AND WANTING MORE
I FELT ALMOST AS I WAS INVADING YOUR SPACE.
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Love the title
Very sweet and romantic write.
Lady Dragonwyck
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i loved it ..so romantic and adorabely sweeet
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Beautiful Jeff!! not only do I adore cappaccino but this was so heartfelt and romantic!! ahh ... melting here like the whipcream on top of my coffee!!
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beautiful
i love this, it portrays a sweet love, romantic and beautiful. good job, i enjoyed it.
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awwwwww
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Beautiful
This is such a lovely poem from beginning to end. Your imagery and rhytmic sense are wonderful, and the thoughts you express are heart-felt and highly sensitive. Thanks so much for sharing.
David Michaels
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Wonderful poem it reminds me of the song of soloman you capture the entity of love beautifully and you werent afraid to put it into a picture. You painted it with wonderful metaphors and stunning imagery great write
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Very nice...I love the scene you painted with your words...do I smell coffee?
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I enjoyed this read, not only for the romanticism inside of it, but what you find by reading in between the lines. I think that you did an absolulte wonderful job with this one
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Thank you.
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WOW!!! This is so beautiful and passionate. Full of emotions. Great Job.
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ahh! I wish someone would speak such beautiful things to me...
at first I didnt like the centered alignment, but as you got into the more descriptive detail, the more it worked. I really started get into the poem after the knight/virgin part. It really started soeaking to me then. My favorite part of the whole thing was how you describe the taste.. beautifully written
thanks for sharing
luv always
Jenae
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I love it, Mr Montague
you have a flare for the love poem, perhaps you are naturally romantic, or perhaps this inspiration behind this poem provided the passion and flare for all you put into this poem, in any case, i can see young men serenading their new lovers with this in years to come, congratulations
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Dripping wet with Amore
Oh Romeo.....How wonderfully romantic and erotic!!! I also picked up on the desperation of your love......wow. And the twist? Here you are elaborating on your amor for your love......so intense. I began reading thinking this was a tribute of love, and then found a twist......if intended, your immersion in your love...finds you not finding a place somewhere else......paradise maybe, but instead finding paradise within your love. Nice twist, I like it.
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Thank you. You are very observant. Many of my poems have a twist in it. For example, “And by discovering who your are, I found me.” or “I love how You’re the beginning
Of all that I’ve longed for.”
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You know what I find interesting? Men and Women are alike in so many ways but diffrent at the same time. Read a few poems by guys than read a few poems by girls theres a huge diffrence in writing style but both genders are excellent poets.
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I agree with you. Talking about differences, you may enjoy this poem, "All Men Are Little Boys" http://allpoetry.com/poem/2483511
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how very sweet. very romantic. i bet your lady-love is going to enjoy this one.^^ Its so honest as well.. great job.
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Thank you.
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This is a very passionate and well described Love.
Your words are very elegant and you obviously Love ths women very deeply. Great write.
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very tender and nicely done! what a lucky lady to have someone who feels the way that you do. this a wonderful tribute to all that goes with just that. thanks for sharing. keep up the great work. peace and light, kendal
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not what i was expecting when i clicked, but it was very well written. I was expecting a humorous poem, but probably because i just wrote one. this was very well written, and I was very surprised. pleasantly so.
Good Write and God Bless
The Unrequited Writer
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beautiful
I love it!
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this is so very romantic and sweet. It's filled with love and wonder...how could any woman resist? Just great.
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Thank you. I'm glad you couldn't resist.
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lovely
Very beautiful poem!!! very Deep!!! I really enjoy it!! you showed alot of emotion!!! Keep on writting!! This poem made me smile!! Thanks!!!
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Your beautiful words reach out and cares the heart and the imagination of the reader. Leaving no part untouched....leaving all emotions burning out of control...When I read this, images surfaced begging for me to read this again....and again....and letting it to continue washing over me....smiles, Terry
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How on earth did I ever live without you and your wonderful comments? I always look very much forward to them. Thank you, Terry. Jeff
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Beautiful
I never tire of your declarations of love for your special lady. I just hope she appreciates it and doesn't hurt you. But from your description of her I don't think that will happen. Good poem. Pen on...
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