all the other times you threw me up against it
i bounced off
well i'm done
i've finally hit the wall
and stayed there
all the words you yelled
and i took for meaningless
well i'm done
i finally hear the truth in them
because you actually believe what you hurling in my ear
there's a electrical charge building in my ear
sending flames to my brain
all the times i didn't let my rage control me
let my "love" for you sooth me
well i'm done
i let the abhor seethe in my bruised body
i'm ready to fight back harder than you
but i'll let it become stronger
consume me so it can consume you
Author notes
8th photo
A contest entry
- Pic inspired...8 options...Show me what you've got. by BenziRae.
400 points, ended March 29, 2007, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
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wow this is an amzing write. I can truly feel the rraw emotion and lust for revenge. I especially love the ending 'i'm ready to fight back harder than you
but i'll let it become stronger
consume me so it can consume you'
a very powerful way to end.
thanks for entering and goodluck -
ahhh, the joys of love....
be back on the 18th to read this again
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nice write ^-^
"well i'm done
i finally hear the truth in them
because you actually believe what you hurling in my ear
there's a electrical charge building in my ear
sending flames to my brain"
Was my favorite part... good job and thanks for entering my contest. -
good
it was really good but repeating "ear" makes it sound weird -
*stutter* wow
The best one for this picture, I think. It was really amazing...The words seemed to flow togeather...Keep writing, i shall expect great things from you!! ;p
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Wow. The raw emotion is overwhelming. Well written. This flows nicely without seeming forced.
"but i'll let it become stronger
consume me so it can consume you "
Perfect ending!
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