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You.

A single look from you can portray a world untouched,
Those eyes that capture me, perhaps too much,
A smile that brightens every single day,
Contagious to the core, try as I may,
Not to smile back, tis all in vain,
You pull me in more deeply once again.

Those arms I have been designed  to fit,
The warmth I feel with you lifts me bit by bit,
A voice so soft it calms away my fears,
It soothes me through the heartache and the tears,
A kindness so unknown to me, so new,
I can't help thinking its too good to be true.

You can make me laugh at a word,
So many things you say are so absurd,
Your randomocity knows no bounds,
I find myself anticipating the next sound,
Of your heartwarming laugh, your pleasant sigh,
Just please don't ever let me hear you cry,

I love the random romance that you bring,
To make me blush, my heart can't help but sing,
Its like you have a light with you always,
To shelter me from even the darkest days,
I can talk to you for an eternity,
And never get tired of hearing your replies to me.

You're spiritually a powerhouse, and morally a rock,
I can see you as my equal, and you gave me quite a shock,
When I found you to be not only truly real,
But really true, and you helped me to heal,
All those doubts I could have had, they're gone,
Because you made me feel like I belong,

I can't imagine any life but this,
I have never known such a bliss,
As I so persistantly do,
Every time I'm with, or think of you. 

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  • Sunkissed xo
    December 18, 2008

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    Aww this is truly divine. You write with such feeling and sweet honesty here, it really makes it such a pleasure to read. So very heartfelt and moving. This was a delight to read. Thank you for entering the contest
    - Katelyn ♥


  • Lady-Pegasus
    June 20, 2007

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    Thank you for your contest submission, I do need to ask you review the rules and edit your submission appropriately. Please reply IN COMMENTS to me and let me know this has been done, thank you.
    I will allow 48 hours for edits.
    As to the poem, it is tender and sweet and reminds me of my own belovèd! He often says random silly things to get me to laugh, we oft are accussed of acting like silly teen newlyweds and I am glad for it! Even in lower case writes it is considered better form to capitalize the personal pronoun "I", just a thought.
    Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Hetohke'e


    • Onionducks
      June 20, 2007
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      Thankyou for commenting! Could you maybe point out to me where i have gone wrong in the poem? I would like to comply with the rules.. but i must be being blind because i can't see which rule i have missed!


  • Whispered Secrets
    April 11, 2007

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    Aww

    I think this poem is very well written....I like how the poem was longer than ones I usually read, too...This reminds me of my boyfriend and it makes me smile a bit. My boyfriend is random and he's stupid and goofy but he does it to make me laugh.

    My favorite lines:

    A smile that brightens every single day,
    Contagious to the core, try as i may,
    Not to smile back, tis all in vain,
    You pull me in more deeply once again.


    Sometimes a smile from someone we love is all we need to make the dark clouds fly away.

    HUGS X HEARTS


  • bittersweet tears
    March 10, 2007

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    wow!! i mean wow! not many poems can make me think of...nothing.and this one it just leaves me thinking of nothing b/c you explained it all. it was hard to read throught tears but it was a very beautifully written poem and it is def. going to my favorites so i can read it whenever. excellent write with great rhymes. keep it up!


  • Sock
    March 10, 2007

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    This is great!! I Love it ducky. The rhyming was consistent throughout, and added a lot to the poem. I usually find that rhyming takes away, but you definitely contradicted that. Excellent write!


  • The Squeeze
    March 10, 2007

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    There are few words to describe what this means to me

    There are tears at my eyes. This poem is something quite different and unique. I loved it, absolutely(you won't find me say this often). Its just beautiful, absolutely

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