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uncovered things

he's a tattoo
climbing up inner walls of  biceps
as though he didn't know the difference
between brick or skin,
vein or vine.

knocked over as a stool,
he's in the center of a tavern;
too publicly unknown to care,

too vehemently everything to stand up as a trunk.

 

he played the role
of weed.


as tattoos of a past
that wouldn't leave the surface now,

it was one too many decades of imprints in the soul
and harpoons in the side.

 

leaving on the upper limb,
his face was covered by a branch that only parted
when october shed itself. there he sat in vain,
waiting for the leaves,
again.

waiting for the rule to drop
of veins and vines
and history,

 

so everything uncovered now

would be covered

 

then. 

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'Sanctuary of Thought' piece.

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  • KiwiTRK
    April 15, 2007

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    cool poem.
    cool line:
    "his face was covered by a branch that only parted
    when october shed itself"

    The whole thing paints a very nice picture. Superb.


  • purpledragonfly
    March 14, 2007

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    just re-read this and i believe you've got a typo
    he's in the center of of a tavern;
    unless you like the of of ?? and who am i to judge?lol

    funny to be in a contest with you... it gives me the giggles [which is a pleasure] and at least i don't have to worry about any trophies cluttering up my page hehee see more giggles....

    hope all is well with you and you're not too stressed over all you try to do - french is awesome and school is fun and ap is entertaining and you're life seems mighty full -keep up the great work. betsy


  • natari
    March 12, 2007
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    excellent


  • lysdarling
    March 12, 2007

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    as tattoos of a past
    that wouldn't leave the surface now,

    it was one too many decades of imprints in the soul
    and harpoons in the side.

    -lovely lines, what an impression this poem makes..
    *lys

  • bombshell betty
    March 12, 2007

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    i feel like what you've described every once in a while: here but not, wanting it, but not, knowing that i've been hurt and will be, yet loving life and not understanding, wishing things would go away, now and then, those things. what does one do? lay on the grooved wood floor that needs a good oil or stand as a trunk against the winter wind?
    i'll choose the latter.
    i really like your style, it inspires me. and your subject selection is a good one, true to life, with randomness as an aid. your word choice is great also.
    thanks
    >>betty--->


  • black--phoenix
    March 11, 2007

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    Excellent write.. Really enjoy your style.

    The lines "waiting for the rule to drop / of veins and vines / and history," stood out for me. Well done, 9crimes.

  • purpledragonfly
    March 10, 2007

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    this is beautifully written... i just got a tattoo and i'm loving it... and it has vines and of course my mother the uptight religious one says it's a mark of the devil, but i see it as my sign of religion.. it's my permanent mark - it's an ankh (with a dragonfly of course and ivy vines). I love the way you say all will be uncovered... & covered... it always is - isn't every hair already accounted for anyway? I figure this tattoo was already waiting for me.... it had been waiting for 40 years for me... it's my cross that doesn't have to be hooked on a chain every morning, can't be stolen or broken.... This was really good noah/j/9/? - another awesome piece!!!


  • Ryno
    March 10, 2007

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    You know I'm not really sure if I understood this one at first, if I get the metaphor of a tattoo or if was actually about it... this is very skillfully written though, and I, of course loved it
    ~Ryan~


  • g r e y i s m
    March 10, 2007

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    the funny thing about this piece, you being a Christian, and myself being a... um... recovering one lol
    it reminded me of that scripture "There is nothing concealed that will not be disclosed, or hidden that will not be made known." lol

    it's a great piece, though, reads nicely.

    best wishes...

    Lea




    • marrow
      March 10, 2007
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      that verse came into my head too as i was writing this. thanks for your comment.

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