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Lily

why dance among

the blades
unpigmented purity

glanced over and
overdressed
by some alien
omnipotent

anointed in
seduction
a scent of
new dead

or life

pumped blindly
from dark amnesia

oblivious perfection

pity John Gallianos
tortured mimicry

underfoot
in his face...

 

Author notes

This is random I know.......but it does have a point. The point is Lily is the name of a flower or the name of a girl. I was thinking how both can be oblivious to their own natural beauty. We often forget to look and wonder at the perfection of the bloom of a flower or of a girls cheek. But some people especially in the fashion idustry, strive constantly to improve on perfection, try to out do nature, but it can't be done. Who needs a blue Lily? SR Option 3

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  • Candy6
    June 25, 2007
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    Very beautiful poem.


  • ibsons hysops
    May 28, 2007

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    mmmmm, i love!

    I agree, who needs every color in order for it to be a lily or every lily even in order for it to be blue, whether a girl or any other name or person or place or thing we can attache anything to. Awsomed, the way you have strung your thoughts so amazingly together! You are a Finalist! Good Luck in the Contest Dear Poet!!!


  • masky
    March 24, 2007

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    I have to say, dear poetress(I guessed it right? ), this is really intriguing. It was, indeed, necesary to take my time and read it carefully, to understand its meaning.
    And, even if I thought of myself as smart, and able to understand even the deepest of a poem's meaning, but yours was only complete with an explanation.
    And, you are right, who needs a blue lily? Are we all oblivious to the perfection of nature, and also, humans? Because the way you chose the two elements(the Lily, the flower, and Lily, the girl) unificates both nature and human beings into one whole: perfect in it's union.
    Fantastic piece, great choice of words, and good luck in the contest!


  • bw43
    March 11, 2007

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    i liked the fact that you included an explanation of your poem. who is john gallianos?

    i liked this. i liked the brief couplets... and your graphic image was real intriguing..


    thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest.


    • swanridur
      March 12, 2007
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      Thank you for your comment and applause. Brill...... John Galliano is a fashion desiner who is rather flambouyant SR x

  • Julianne1234
    March 10, 2007
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    I love that this is random....yet, in a way, its not. I would love to be able to write like this


  • Fire N Ice
    March 10, 2007
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    Ooooo

    I love this!
    very thought provocing write here, it makes you sit back and think,
    Fantastic!


    • swanridur
      March 10, 2007
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      Thank you

      Thank you for your applause (again) I love it. The contest asks for random........ Glad you get it my lovely....x

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