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Soaring

Surrounded by soft beauty,

this spring ache,
calling my breath so sweetly.
I wish I were free as the wind,
to roam hills and plains.
graceful and unfettered.
Timeless.
To be barefoot in the greenest grass,
the scent of rain thick on the air,
with thunder growling along my skin.
Sharing secrets under Orion's gaze.
Longing.
To raise my voice with the sparrows,
spill my glow over others.
Transport them to this place,
this spring ache.

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  • Anjole-Of-The-Artz
    August 9, 2007

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    Woah.

    This makes me want to run outside in a thunderstorm barefoot and slowdance with my boyfriend while singing one of our favorite songs! lolz. I love the basic idea of freedom and entrancing beauty embeded in each line. =]


  • God is my reality
    July 28, 2007
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    Those who hope in the Lord will renew their strength they will soar on wings of eagles. They will run and not grow weary they will walk and not be faint

    This poem is beautifully written. I love your use of imagery. It makes me want to run through grass, and smell the rain, and hear thunder.


  • cherche -d -ame
    July 28, 2007

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    I enjoyed the way you put this into "wish form". But the more I read , the more I realized that it is a feeling that I know I must have experienced [as a matter of fact I do believe many of us do, at the first sign of every spring, when all seems perfect and new with the world] Unfortunately it does not last long [but these words of yours are now "eternalized"] Such is the beauty of writing our thoughts down. They become part of the "ALL"
    Blesed Be,
    reenie


  • Karon
    July 25, 2007

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    Beautifully written. The soft and simple gentle perplexities were placed within the imagry nicely; not too overwhelming. I enjoyed the feel of the rythem as well. Thank you for sharing.

  • Goodbye blue sky
    July 22, 2007

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    Very beautiful, the imagery is strong and intriging. Loved the way you worded it and kept the flow.
    Nicely penned.


  • PhoenixFaith
    July 16, 2007

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    Really enjoyable write it shows freedom and beauty and many ideas. It is very wonderful. I especially like the line: "Sharing secrets under Orion's gaze" I love that line. Great job keep it up.

    Never give up
    Kate


  • opaqueangel
    July 15, 2007

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    wow i really enjoyed this peice. you have amazing imagery here and it really made me long for that same kind of freedom. keep up the good writing


  • silverscent gold member
    July 14, 2007

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    "Spring ache" what an amazing image. The poem had a very delicate and natural tone, very light and airy. I think your simple choice of words made it that more enjoyable. Thanks for sharing.


  • frankey
    July 14, 2007

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    This took me on a beautiful ride, or rather flight. A flight of fancy. This had everything without overflowing. The imagery was lush and the journey just long enough to leave you wanting more but grateful for the journey it took you on.


  • Candy6
    July 7, 2007
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    A great beautiful poem.


  • CinematicInk
    July 4, 2007
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    I love the astronomy reference and the calm language used throughout.


  • Barely Breathing gold member
    July 3, 2007

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    This is so wonderful. It has such a feeling of peace and serenity about it and I could feel all these things around me as I read it. There is wonderful imagery with nature. Well done.


  • nlacey216
    July 3, 2007

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    Great poem

    I like how you express wanting such an innocent freedom. You have expressed nature well in this. Good Luck and keep up the good work.

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