A silent soul
in a dark, empty place
I sit, waiting, watching
and brooding on my vengeance.
Hah!
Who's there?
Nothing but darkness echoes me.
GAAH!!
I can't take this anymore!!
The departed souls are leaning on me
weighing down my feet,
my arms, my throat,
my breath
my sight
with their cries,
their spilt blood bubbles for atonement
and I must be the sacrifice...
Enough.
My mind is clear,
soul empty,
eyes closed
as the Fourth Vision takes hold
and I see destiny
There!
Was that a shadow?
No, this place is dark.
Fool that I am,
I ran,
I hid,
I cried and pleaded for mercy
when others dropped their weapons
calmly stared death in the face
and took it with a measure of grace.
I never had that courage,
so now I prove I do
that I have filled the abyss
that remains gapingly deep.
Time is meaningless
yet everything-
as I go, I lose it all
strength, beauty, wit, and purpose
so I must be
the striking hawk,
the biting snake,
the shadow of the hunting falcon
and seize elusive satisfaction!
But deep inside I know...
NO!!
My soul is shredding at the seams!!
I completed my purpose
and am still searching
groping in the darkness
no light
no joy
death by my hand is the only escape
but my code forbids it
signed and sealed with my own blood
so I wait eternal years
and thwart destiny by cutting a slice out of time
take to a vault for a thousand years
and awaken only when my blood stirs again-
maybe never,
maybe forever.
Singsong follies-
the ashes my life,
psuedo-life
was reduced to
I see myself in the wake of flying needles
and feel their sharpened ends bounce off my hawk's-curse form
but inside I hear emptiness echo
as they reverbrate in my cavity of pain
so the ice mirrors reflect
a black hole
in my heart
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abstract sasuke, not very good. Who cares?
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I think this really does show the darkness Sasuke fell into. But he didn't really fall into it did he? He dove into it. Forgetting everything yet remembering it all and diving right in there because he needs power...the power that will avenge his past...but what will he do after that?
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i actually clicked this poem coz your username has the word Uchiha. anyway, this poem really described the darkness that Sasuke has fallen into. good job!!! woo!
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COME TO THE DARK SIDE! We have SASUKE! (And cookies for you, Deidara, yeah!)
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YES! We all love the Uchiha!
Aya: We are family...
Sasuke: ...cut that out.
Aya: I GOT ALL MY BROTHERS WITH ME!!
Sasuke: ...don't you only have two? And doesn't it really go, I've got all my SISTERS with me?
Aya: Um, yeah...
Sasuke: Hnn. Then do it the right way.
Aya: Fine. Emo dude.
Sasuke: steel chick.
Aya: ?!?!?!?!
Sasuke: whatever...go to Aya's page on Storywrite.com to see what she's talking about.
Aya: ...way to propagandize, nii-san.
Sasuke: Hnn. In case you're really confused, it'll clear it up. http://storywrite.com/Aya%20Uchiha , don't forget.
Aya: ?!?!?!?!
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wow snap you have lots of trophies! I guess...I am defeated *droops head seeing her meagre four gold trophies...*
siena!!!
I like the emotion you captured in this piece, though I think it would be good to end with a hope for Siena... -
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what's ith the random trophies thing? You've got more gold than me, I think...and I'm done entering every single contest...
I think lots of my new stuff is gonna be Naruto/SiS junk. It expresses itself beautifully in poetry
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