I will give you peace and return you to the purity, you can only vaguely remember,
I promise you dignity and solace for the the insane,
And as I take your last breathe, I will give you the gift of death.
A contest entry
- Three AMAZING lines by Lj-.
340 points, ended March 11, 2007, 32 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Wow. This is pretty strong stuff that you have here girl!
I liked how the words and lines still lead into a kind of story that made sense and you didn't try to just lean on shock value or something like that. Too many people do that and I don't think it means as much. You did a good job.
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I like it. Not much else to say.
Thank you for entering,
Good luck!
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What a powerful and emotion packed write! Wow is all I can say Excellent write
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These lines do pack a powerful punch! Some never see death as a gift and admits, there are times even I still struggle with that moment to come. Great perception of the picture and best wishes in the contest
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