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too much

lost patiance rushing at me
the deafening roar of words without thought
30 seconds of emotions so intense it leaves the silence shocked

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  • Lj-
    March 10, 2007
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    I like this a lot. Very nice description.


    In line two:

    "deffening" should be "deafening"


    In line three:

    "intence" should be "intense"



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