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Eyelid Tales

Daggers stab in a second of impulse
blood gushes, victims mutilated, corpse outlines in mass,
signal turns to green - blink - hate must wait till the next red light.

A contest entry

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  • Lj-
    March 10, 2007

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    This is good. Nice description here, a bit gruesome, you know, maybe a tiny bit. I like it though.


    Good write.

    Thank you for entering,
    Best of luck.


    • penman gold member
      March 10, 2007
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      Thank you. Yes,it was a bit gruesome. Road rage left to the accelerate and brake pedal.


  • Deceits Tears silver member
    March 9, 2007
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    wow do you think i can have my car back now lol nice write .


    • penman gold member
      March 9, 2007
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      Does it have to have no dents? How about knife gashes on the upholstery?


  • Desire gold member
    March 9, 2007
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    Holy Momma-


    I won't mention any road rage or anything of that nature
    Oh My~
    I think I'll just toss my entry out the car window~
    before the light turns~
    Magnificent Dark write!

    Powerful piece in three lines

    Best wishes to You in the contest!
    Many blessings too
    and my Love~ Desire

    • penman gold member
      March 9, 2007
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      They do have pills for road rage now. But it does have side affects. It makes you think you are in race. So that can create other problems.

      • Desire gold member
        March 9, 2007
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        Well if You are driving then I will be in the same car with You so I can be the backseat driver

        and get it on

        • penman gold member
          March 9, 2007
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          Oh never love. Can drive with you in the backseat unless I can join you. My car is an automatic so I suppose it could go by itself.

          • Desire gold member
            March 9, 2007
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            You know we can't make this Happy at all
            so for Dark sake...
            the car can drive by itself..You know like Christine...Stephen King

            • penman gold member
              March 9, 2007
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              Oh I think we will do lots of driving love in the car. It might not go far, but I'm sure we will. Hmmm, I hope I wouldn't risk a speeding ticket for a moving violation. Guess you would be controlling my peddle.


              • Desire gold member
                March 9, 2007
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                Oh You are having me rolling over here...
                Is that legal...

                • penman gold member
                  March 9, 2007
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                  Sounds like an AP hubby hug emergency. Can't let you suffer you know. I'll be glad to apply mouth to rolling as necessary.


                  • Desire gold member
                    March 9, 2007

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                    Is this becoming a Dark Erotica piece
                    j/k...
                    Nottttttttt~


                    • penman gold member
                      March 9, 2007
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                      Fasten your seat belt love, it's going to be a bumpy ride. With a fill up along the way.

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