A waterfall of emotion washes over me
My chest tightens as I find it hard to breathe
Intense pain consumes me that I cannot see
Exhausted from fighting, I break down and grieve
Visions of death are ever so enticing
Ending my life would put me at rest
Numerous people would find it surprising
That such a sweet girl could be so depressed
Images of blades dance in my mind
Desire to end things once and for all
Newfound agony attacks from behind
Draining my essence as I suddenly fall
Crumbling to the harsh, bitter floor
Screams muffled from lava hot tears
Internal enemies tear at my core
Gaining in strength they pray on my fears
Overpowered by darkened emotions
Overshadowed by terrifying visions
Enveloped by venomous potions
Dreadfully slashed from my decisions
All life is fading quickly from sight
No words are left for me to write
Towards the depths of darkness I’m drawn
Don’t try to save me… I’m already gone
Author notes
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lerverboy
A contest entry
- I want to feel your emotion by Darkened Seraph.
500 points, ended March 14, 2007, 18 entries
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Comments
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Very dark and vividly written. You can almost feel the dark emotions flooding off the page with every word. Very nice, m'lady.
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Wow this is pretty awesome, good luck in those contests. I really like the different imagery and the rhymes were different, not just off the shelf. Well done, keep it up and take care x
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this is really good!! I really like the imagery used to put your feeling across its brilliant, i especially like:
Crumbling to the harsh, bitter floor
Screams muffled from lava hot tears
Internal enemies tear at my core
Gaining in strength they pray on my fears
this is such a good stanza and really makes me feel how the person must be feeling, a really good write. well done
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