In my mind i find myself strolling,
Watching each pebble as it gleams,
Washed by the waves neverending,
As i walk along the beach of broken dreams.
This is the place where the sandman gets his sand,
Puts it in his pouch for you and me,
He looks into our framed hearts desires,
Lost thoughts and forgotten memories.
One night i lost my way inside my head,
I felt the sand beneath my feet so bare,
I heard the calming sound of those waves,
Now i often find my way back there.
I stop a while and glance at our pictured thoughts,
A smile slowly spreads, though my eyes stream,
I realise that we are all the same,
We all have walked that beach of broken dreams.
Somewhere deep inside each one of us,
Is the sound of the calming sea,
There is the place we throw our ashes to the wind,
there, on that beach of broken dreams.
In a list
A contest entry
- Photo Inspired 2 by real irish rose.
450 points, ended March 14, 2007, 29 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Easy Points!!!!!!!! by Kathraina.
675 points, ended January 4, 52 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is very beautiful and touching. I loved it mucho ^.^ Good job, and Good Luck
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This is beautiful and that is my escape too...the beach and noticing the wonder in it all. Blessings.
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A very thought provoking write, one that speaks loudly of the emotions you felt when you looked at the image, you are correct with all you have written this was just amazing to read.... and something I for one can totally relate too, thankyou so much for entering and goodluck...julie
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Very placid, yet lonesome poem. It is incredible how well this piece is able to invoke a feeling of anguish and sadness…a pining feeling. Very intense, truly grips the reader with its sad, lonely, relatable tune. I adore the imagery and flow of this piece. It is very much like a song, almost. Very well done, no picture is needed to show the imagery this metaphoric piece displays; it stands firmly on its own, displaying its divine, lonesome melody. It really reeled me in and captured me. I especially loved that last stanza; it leaves the reader to think and sort of mull over it a bit, or at least it did me. Very inspiring. It is very brilliant how well the poem is able to capture the reader and truly invoke such emotion; very well done!
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Thankyou so much for taking the time to stop by and write such an extensive comment on my poem. I really did appreciate it, im so glad that it could get across in such a way! You really brightened my day with your thoughts!
Keep Smiling
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