Tolerance is not my game
If you want to dwell me,
disrespecting you shall not
Bale is count as shame
from you I will not accept it
Rampaging against me
will only result with your butt kicken
Excuse me, Sir
I mis-behaved
as I have been wandering about
near your window,
after you cussed me out
Revengeful indeed
thy won't exceed
a mortal's capacity
of dreed
I might be merciful,
but my wrath shan't be stomped
if one does wrong
towards an innocent, a child or a female
as thus is thee's dead end
Excuse me, Ma'am
if I'm too blunt
but dreadful concealing of my thoughts
cannot be done
In love and richness of the heart,
my soul's strength cannot be conquered
by meaningless thoughts
This is
a part of me
Highly moraled,
but with little embalment
A free spirit
roaming the surroundings,
but with wary eyes
I shall seek the dark
Author notes
Name: BluesMermaid
This is kinda weird and off my style but -.- thought I'd try it out for the contest
A contest entry
- For Trophies That Shine Group Only by Angel With No Halo.
700 points, ended March 17, 2007, 9 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Keep writing such good poems
Good work dear poet. I love the way the poem moves. It is filled with wonderful metaphors. Nice to see such a very young girl from Bahrain do this excellent work. I would be happy, if you could spare some time to stamp your views on my poems. -
This is really good..I do not see how it fits the title.. but very well done anyhow. The flow was great and the angst is very well interpreted. Keep up the good work(it is nice to stray from normalities sometimes) Thank you for entering and good luck!!
~Krys~
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yeh, thought that the title doesn't really have anything to do with the poem itself, but it was still the begining of it and what got me to writing it, so the link would be that it's its creator
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it's good...you seem pretty mad in it..
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yeh, I kinda only took my serious side into this poem, not my whole self
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Try this style again... It's amazing. I'd like to see some more of this out of you... You're so talented, and it's always nice to see some diversity (yeah I know I'm a bit hypocritical there... same stlye pretty well all the way through =]). Good job and good luck in the contest.
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hehe, thanx sweetcake
I kinda felt weird about it, almost had the urge to take it off even but ty, u made me feel abit more secure about it ^-^
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