I can see her drowning
Black water pressing down on her head
Dragging her deeper down into the abyssal depths
And weighing her like an anchor, is his hand.
I watch her sink deeper
Until the air escaping from her lungs hardly makes a bubble
When it reaches me, here in the surface world
But I am powerless to stop it.
I see her stare doom in the face
And watch her features twist in fear of the inevitable
As it dawns on her that she's far too deep to save herself
But I am powerless to stop her
For she is still holding his hand for dear life.
Author notes
This little piece came to me the other night, while thinking about an abusive relationship I was currently in (am out now). I was also thinking about a friend of mine, who I knew was in a bad relationship, but I couldn't say anything to her. She was my best friend, you know? If she's happy, I'd rather see her smile... It was a rare occurrence. It's true, though. You can't say anything to someone you know is in a bad relationship. This hopefully describes some of the feelings accurately. I know it's how I felt. And I love the image of drowning. No matter how used it is, it is still so powerful to me, because I feel it every day.
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Comments
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wow so much powerfull and painfull emotion..this is a really great write so sad..you are very talented
the wording and imagery in this poem was amazing...great talent and keep it up good luck in the contest
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Oh dear this is so sad. I will keep you in my prayers. I pray that God will send you an answer to your problems. Jesus died on the Cross for you and I. He loves you so much. I pray that God will give you strength. Keep penning and letting your heart flow. I love you and I am praying for you.
God bless you dear.
In Chrsit Jesus,
Tabitha
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this was a really nice poem, and it seemed to me to be more of a lost-love poem instead of a abusive relationship poem.
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Actually, I believe it's better to tell them something, they may hate you for awhile at first (most likely they will) but then they'll eventually thank you, because if they stay in the relationship, one day they'll realise what is happening.
I've seen it all too often.
This is truly great, it feels so horrible when you cannot save them, and even talking to them won't actually save them.
I too have been in horrible relationships. So bad I was nearly killed several times, until finally the police stepped in, along with social workers (they were coming out of peoples asses, I'm telling you!)
Anyway, keep it up and I hope your friend and you are ok now.
DC
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I am all right, and I'm sure she is too... I haven't spoken to anyone from that time of my life in a year now. Thanks for so many comments on my work. I'll try to return them when the tumult has died down a bit.
Sarah
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Been there done that!
ive been in an abusive relationship before and ive watched my mom go through it for the last couple of years and in my opinion you described it perfectly! it runs smoothly too, great job!
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It sucks to watch it. You're fortunate that you got out... so many people don't. Good luck in the future and thanks for commenting.
Sarah
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Very Real!
i really like this poem, it kind of reminds me of what im going through right now, not an abusive relationship(at least not physically) but a relationship that i know i should have relieved myself from such a long time ago. This poem can be taken in so many different ways, and i lyke that because it helps more people relate to it. nice write..i loved it
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Abuse comes in many forms, my friend. You just have to love yourself enough to stop it.
Sarah
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This is so sad, especially the last two lines. Abuse is very much like that. It's good you're out.
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Out is a relative term. I believe relationships like that are a disease. They never truly go away. Thanks for the comment.
Sarah
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I can relate to this helpless feeling
in many ways. Thanks for sharing.
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Great Write
I felt the same lately too...
Hope you're better--& wish you a luckier relationship later on..
<3
GloriousGift
--Heba
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Thanks. Hopefully I'll find someone who isn't a complete jerk.
Sarah
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