I
Am a
Hopeless son,
A grain farmer,
Lover of music,
A wonderful brother,
A real emotional wreck,
A very self conscious loner,
Saddened by the sick world around me,
A caring and kind individual.
A contest entry
- 10 Lines About You (Etheree form) by Lyre-Bird-.
450 points, ended March 14, 2007, 21 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I don't see how you are hopeless, as you are a very hopeful poet. However, i do not know you in person enough to make that statement. I really like this piece, as it shows how much you think of yourself in different ways from perspectives, eg,
"A very self conscious loner...
...A caring and kind individual"
Very honest and interesting piece. Well done!
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Hmm
I really liked this. You are not Hopeless though. You are full of very much hope. Your poetry shows that to me. This is really good. And true. For the most part lol. you are Caring and kind. Wonderful write again. Keep it flowing
Always
emily -
You forgot a great poet and an even greater friend. You do well with describing yourself. Though I think you are much more then you say you are.
~Oka
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Man...seems I forgot a few things that other people see, that I don't...thanks Oka
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I love it!!
You forgot Hero though.
Angie
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Damn, I knew I was forgetting something
Thanks
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Firstly I would like to thank you for entering the contest!!!!!
BRAVO BRAVO!!!!
Wow such much you have expressed within your poem.... A real insight into your soul, some sadness, some darkness, but such a wonderful last line
A caring and kind individual.
I am sure you really are a wonderful soul
Good luck
Tracey
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