newspapers
gone yellow
colours tarnish
in the memoirs
like lint and cinders
clinging to the transparent mirror
of an antique still-life
of dried orchids in cobweb
a vortex
of smoke
diffuses
into the autumn whispers
bubbles
burst
iridescent showers
lost
a pothole
once a puddle
now dry
an amber leaf
undisturbed
crushed by a footfall
strings
plucked
remembered in echoes
thé dansant of fingers
over black and white
prolonged afterimages
whispers and dreams
graves
flashbacks
experiences
sighs
Author notes
thé dansant = tea dance
word inspiration, "history"
A contest entry
- Options *NO RHYME* by FindingFate.
600 points, ended March 11, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrites by February Moon.
1750 points, ended July 31, 2007, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Transitions by Danna Hobart.
375 points, ended December 30, 2007, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Constructive Criticism Appreciated!!
Comments
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I loved your imagery. Thank you for entering my contest.
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thanks loads! I'm glad you enjoyed it.. 
Wishing you a wonderful new year!
bless ya!
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Amazing, my favorite stanza would have to be the first.
"newspapers
gone yellow
colours tarnish
in the memoirs
like lint and cinders
clinging to the transparent mirror
of an antique still-life
of dried orchids in cobweb"
Amazing, all the elegance of tea party, with haunted feelings of ghosts of the past.
Thank you so much for entering, and good luck to you.
Chelsea
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a delighted thanks to you! i much appreciate the HM! my pleasure you really liked this! thanks for your views and pointing out your favourite lines!
bless ya!
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Brillant first stanza, I loved the imagery in it and throughout your poem.
'of dried orchids in cobweb'
this line evokes such a strong idea of memories forgotten but still lingering, waiting to be found. You've used the one word inspiration really well I thought. Good luck in the contest.
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hey thanks loads! even i like that line a lot!
i'm glad you find this worth reading.
bless ya!
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Wow, wonderful work. I love the idea of one-word inspiration and you nailed it. I can definitely see history in it. "like newspapers
gone yellow
colours tarnish
in the memoirs"
Awesome...
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thanks for pointing out your fav lines! i appreciate your read and the applause!
bless ya!
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No problem, I love this whole poetry thing. It's like I have an unlimited supply of books again lol.
Thanks,
Brian
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i agree w/ the first commenter..the imagery is lovely...it captures my mind and has me picturing each word as i read it...nice write
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oh, you make me feel good!
thank you so much!!
bless ya!
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lovely
thoughts.
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thank you!! glad you like it!
bless ya!
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Wow. Beautiful imagry. I can totally just feel this write. Very well writen. hehe. Amazing job. Keep up the great work!
Tori
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hey, thanks loads Tori!
i'm glad you liked this piece!
bless ya!
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