Morning
brings it's
fire painted skies.
~as~
Night time brings
moon lit
eyes.
Author notes
(Hay[na]ku) 3 lines,6 words inform of 1/2/3 or 3/2/1. I tried both ways, tieing both together.
A contest entry
- Another Hay[na]ku (my 50th contest on AP) by cherche -d -ame.
1050 points, ended March 24, 2007, 32 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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dont know what Hay[na]ku is but great write hehe!
MINDIE -
I like the reversal of the chains from the first 123 to 321, your picture is stunning as well and your words compliment it perfectly. Thank you for your entry and best wishes in the contest,
reenie
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i like the pic for this it fits the poem perfectly i mean that you did a great job on this, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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I really like how you went to the 1-2-3 word count as the opening of day scene to the 3-2-1 word count as day's end scene to this hay(na)ku-chain, Gary. It's effective in the reading and even in the overall feeling of day's beginning dwindling to a close.
Truly enjoyed the read!
Jo
P.S.: The image you've posted is eloquent to this post!!!
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This is awesome. the pic and the write... well done and i wish you luck in the contest.
cheers
Jen -
Nicely Done
Nicely done on this piece dear brother. Good luck with this in the current contest it is in.
Keep writing
Love Your Little Sis
Countrybabe
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