When will these soiled hands
Caress your skin
In tenderness?
When yesterday was too late,
And tomorrow too soon...
Or should those be reversed?
When will these dirty fingernails
Scratch your back
In passion?
When wanting makes it worse,
And waiting makes it better...
Or should those be reversed?
When will these sullied lips
Speak the phrase
They are forbidden?
When all hope is gone,
But a dream remains...
Or should those be reversed?
Author notes
Dirty fingernails seemed a good metaphor for sexual experience, and the rest followed.
A contest entry
- Dirty Fingernails by Polaja.
700 points, ended April 5, 2007, 30 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Excellent! Congrats on the shiny Silver cup for this piece, it's most deserved!
The metaphor used in this short piece is truly wonderful. A stunning symbolism translates to the reader. Your repeating line is thoroughly eloquent! You designed this write with highly emotive thoughts and a deep inner presence. Fantastic! It's been a real pleasure for this Poetic Bandit to stop by for a visit this morning!
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I really love this interpretation ... The way you used poetic device in the 'or should those be reversed' was amazing ... and this poem left me with a feeling of wistful desire ... talented write
Stay smiling and keep writing
Polly -
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thanks, sweetie
as always, your interpretation is perfect: wistful desire was exactly what i was feeling when i wrote this.
love & hugs,
C~
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Wow such powerful words that paint a picture in your mind, so expressive, very well written.
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Good job!
A very insightful interpretation... Well written and expressive... I like the way that you laid this piece out. Good luck in the contest!
Debi
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