As I lie awake here in this bed
Breathing my lifes final breath.
Knowing any second I may be dead
Wanting my ever present death.
I hear the people cry around me
As i mumble "don;t you worry,
I have been what I wanted to be
A sharp pain goes up my spine
A haggering sough excaps my lips
It seems if death is telling me its time
As if I'm taking my lifes energy final dip
My eyes are slowly closing now
as the pain gradually subsides
Like the curtains final bow
I can see the light forward
And flames to my back
So i move onward
The path of light my only track
I see a figure all in white
A marvelous beautiful angel
As he takes me into the light
A contest entry
- 24 Hours To Live by The Order of Chaos.
650 points, ended March 20, 2007, 16 entries
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OMG!!! i love this poem it is AWESOME!!!!! i don't even know what to say i am speechless. great job
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Well OK... first off I just need to mention... you put a semi colon in don;t... that's just been bugging me. Anyway, I suppose no one can really say what it's like to die other than those who have actually died... what a catch 22 that is huh? But I'd imagine you are correct in some ways... pain subsiding as reality fades into whatever world or lack there of you are about to transcend to. And knowing you, you don't seem to hold a large amount alot of fear for death, but you don't have to be so accepting of the concept either.
The only Depenable thing about the future is Uncertainty
-Chaos
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