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Sculpted Life

      Crying in the corner, I try to hide from all the stares
      However it is futile, because everybody cares. 
They meddle in my business,
And gossip behind my back.
Even when I run away,
They always end up on my track.
      My  soul  has been  chained  to a path,
      If I leave, I face a  horrid  wrath. 
My life is no longer mine to live,
Yet I wish it could be so.
That I could make my own choices,
Own mistakes, and go with the flow.
      My  flesh  is sculpted plaster,
      And inside I am a  bleeding  disaster. 
For now I follow as I am told,
Cruising through life with my feelings inside.
Not wanting to die at this moment,
To the rules, I abide.
      Schemes unfold in my mind,
      Eventually they will unfold, but in their own time. 

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Used the words: Soul, Chain, Horrid, Flesh, Bleeding

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  • The Existentialist
    April 23, 2007
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    again. this seems very forced as far as the rhyming is concerned, and the flow is a bit off. however, i sense this emotion, this longing, that is just dying to break free inside the poem. try editing it, making it less rhymey, let it flow from you and see what you get.

    love and rainbow kisses,
    the existentialist

  • samcuy
    March 13, 2007
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    i like the way you wrote it. how it's abab for a part, then dd. it's cool. your rhymes are great. the ending is really good and i feel i can relate to this. it stinks having everyone watch your every move, but i try to think better off coming off as a weirdo than a fake. great poem.
    sam


  • Bella Luna
    March 13, 2007

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    I love it katie it really captures the feeling of being desprit, desprit to run away and take people you don't care about out of your life. luv ya


  • reckless abandon
    March 10, 2007
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    great peom

    i liked it and it had a lot of feeling in it but i just didn't like the flow of it
    i understood what you were saying, and it felt like i could connect, but it just felt like something wasn't working.
    maybe it's just me because it really is a good poem

    from katie!


  • Buried in Black
    March 8, 2007

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    I can just feel every emotion in this, and the description was just unreal. Love it all like always, and love you too


  • Xx Morbid Beauty xX
    March 8, 2007

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    wow

    this was an amazing write....thanxs so very much for entering...... good luck in this contest.....
    and thanxs again for entering....
    Krissy


  • Layla Thomas
    March 8, 2007
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    I can see and feel the wants and needs in your words here... very good write

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