Harbored thoughts are set free,
Each time your arms,
Reach around to hold me,
Embracing me tightly,
Inverting the colours of my world,
No longer monotone normalcy, no,
Yesterday’s vibrantly coloured joy,
Once more returns to me,
Untying the bindings on my heart,
Relinquished hope takes flight,
Abstract paintings, life and love,
Roll through my mind like fog,
Meanwhile, I savor those seconds I’m here,
Safe... in your arms.
Author notes
Catalyst-cry
A contest entry
- Supreme Options Contest by AngieMae.
500 points, ended April 5, 2007, 34 entries
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Very nice flow here and the words work well. You used the form really well - it was discreet and you weren't fumbling around for words to start with (or at leas thtat didnt come across when I was reading it!).
Thankyou for entering and good luck in my contest.
Katie -
Good usage of the form and the words are brilliant.
Thanks so much for participating in my contest. I wish you all the best. I encourage you to keep on writing my friend.
>>>VIRGOAN -
I love the way it rolls and does not have bumps in the flow of it.
Riftkin
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Wonderful acrostic. Though this is an acrostic, and when using multiple words, those words get separated, I think you should merge them together because when reading it, the flow is continuous, but when read correctly, with the space breaks equaling pauses, the flow gets abrupted.. Aside from that, this is a magnificent piece!
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This is actually a really cool idea. I like how you didn't make it all cheesy like most acrostics are and you made it a more elegant piece. I remember what this feels like, and you captured it perfectly. I like it!
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thanks!!!!!! =]
I'm glad you liked it.
I had fun with the words I used throughout this. I didn't want to make it cheesy, like you said, so I tried to find some...intellectual-like words to use. =]
Again, thanks for your nice comment.
~Lyz
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I absolutely loved this. I can't even pick a favorite part, it was just how the whole thing worked together to create a feeling of exhilarating contentment. Great job. Thanks for entering and good luck!
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awww, that's so sweet. Acrostics are loads of fun. Heart it
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Great job!!! I like this, it's very romantic.
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