bubbles floating up
popping like my dreams
floating on a cload
lasting forever so it seems
falling down on raindrops
kissing the soft grass
flooding down like memories
of an unwanted past
then filling up in puddles
of forgotten sorrow
pooling up the troubles
we got rid of for tomorrow
leaking in our consiousness
reliving all the pain
only to be rained back down
into puddles once again
Author notes
i felt sad..., i hope you enjoy it!
much luv~
shadowed
A contest entry
- I need an allpoetry Girlfriend (ladies only--winner take all) by Intravenous Jesus.
2400 points, ended August 19, 2007, 16 entries
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great poem here youy have used a various similies which is great to see in poems, as it highlights imagery well done
think youve a typo love cload not sure if this should be cloud..well done in penning this amazing poemxx
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Oh my, you are very good in describing your pain! You do it so well...can't wait to read more!
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