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Prejudice

soft notes
deep notes
                wafting      from      the      gymnasium

make me    smile    as i exit,

with out
knowlege




i love




and keep with
me

those sounds
the sounds


till i arrive
home.

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  • muzicalquest
    March 25, 2007

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    interesting?

    was there a particular purpose to the spacing? if so, what? Also, i liked your idea of retrograde, but the overall poem lacked symmatry. perhaps giving a more clearly defined form would give the reader a better sense of closure thus, when you return home, the reader feels the same way.

    over all, nice idea.