window to another world
open up and set me free
don't make me just another girl
open my eyes and let me see
let your winds teach my soul
how to fly and be sweet
let my heart become whole
let your grass tickle my feet
kill my pains with your sunlight
make my worries fade away
make everything forever right
at least alright for just today
kiss my teardrops with flowers
make them have to learn to leave
give me soft and peaceful showers
and let the rain help me believe
window to another world
open up and set me free
don't make me just another girl
open my eyes and let me see
with your harsh cold walls
you make it hard to realize
the strong beauty that calls
but it's in the beholders eyes
let me skip in your meadow
with wild flowers all around
let all of your rivers flow
and the birds emit sweet sound
let me stay in your gardens
please never have me leave
never let the walls fall in
please say you won't leave me
window to another world
open up and set me free
don't make me just another girl
open my eyes and let me see
Author notes
I like this and I hope you do too!!!
much luv~
shadowed
A contest entry
- For anyone 15 and under (sorry everyone else) Mount Juliet by little-hug.
450 points, ended March 26, 2007, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think!! CRITIQUE YOUR HEARTS OUT!!! I NEED HONESTY!!!
Comments
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....breath-taking
This is just stunning. The imagery and message are both so delicately entwined to create a beautifully written poem. I absolutely love this verse :
"kiss my teardrops with flowers
make them have to learn to leave
give me soft and peaceful showers
and let the rain help me believe"
I'm not sure what else to say right now.. except thank you so much for entering and good luck !
ellie
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Thankyou Thankyou!!
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Beautiful and enchanting poem. Possibly just a little over drawn out.
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Thankyou for the suggestions!
I know it may seem a bit long, but my muse hit me, so I had to go the whole way!!!!
much luv~
shadowed
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