Jutting rocks formed crumbling crags
As I watched them pitch,
Headlong into the sea.
Imagine the salt-air rushing past their ears.
Their eyes sting with the wind.
Crumbled rocks break again on a hard sheet of sea.
Crawling backwards,
Tears in my eyes as I scream
Out against the roaring winds.
But no one is there to hear me.
Turn, and run.
Cannot stand a moment more upon that cliff of crumbling rock.
Thorns scratch at my dress,
And buckled shoes slip.
Eyes tight shut to keep in the tears as I blunder helplessly.
Arrive here.
The graveyard where you left me.
Left me standing.
The graveyard where I know I should be.
Brush away hair;
Salted and tangled.
Gulp down air
And stare
At the place where I know I should be.
Pain wells up inside me,
Until I cannot help but keel to the floor
And pull the grass from around my grave.
Real sadness,
Was being lost to you.
Real sadness
Is when you cannot hear me cry out for you.
Trace the markings on the gravestone,
The place where I should be,
And mouth the words that lie there.
My final resting place.
Bury me.
Bury me alive beside you,
So that I might watch you while I die.
Bury me aside you,
In the grave that should have been mine.
True sadness is knowing it should have been me.
A contest entry
- You have NEVER been sad!!! If you think you've been 'SAD' enter a poem in this contest!! AND I'LL SEE!!! by SilverMoonFeathers.
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Comments
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wow i can in vison this hapining. it seems to me like a girl died and became a gost. but i dont kwno. but its realy good.
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This is so strong and powerful that I was staring really hard at the screen and my eyes are only just now adjsting to looking at the eyboard to type this!
You definitely have loads of emotion in here, and you didn't need rhyme, or form or anything like that to keep it together. It flowed beautifully and the story unfolded nicely - you didn't tell us everything too soon, or cram it in right at the end.
I could see the whole of this poem really vividly in my mind - absolutely brilliant imagery, and the whole way you worded it just made it really super.
OMG I LOVE U!
Oh, yeah almost 4got!
Thnakyou for entering and good luck in my contest.
Katie -
this was sad but i get this poem very much and it is one that i can relate to because when i tryed to burn myself alive i failed to do so i sat on a fire for 3 hours while being drunk i got no burns and i didnt die like i wanted to the only thing that i lost was my memories of my uncle gary who had killed him 19 days before i did and this happend almost 7 years ago so i no how you feel thanks for sharing and God Bless DI.
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Oooh I like the ending, heartfelt. The whole thing was quite beautiful. I liked the imagery especially. I could see it all.
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