Running, pulsing, in our veins
Pounding, pouncing, in our brains
It saves us from starvation and gives us life
Never shall it harm us or bring us strife
Pouring out through slits in my skin
Ringing through our ears, can't ever win
Gushing out in torrents of red
Seeping and dripping from my coffin bed
It gives us movement and never lets us stumble
It keeps us cradled like a baby in a trundle
Vapire-ish...tell me what's up!
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i loved this poem, i thought that you described the blood very well, i enjoyed reading this poem and i loved the part
It saves us from starvation and gives us life
Never shall it harm us or bring us strife
Pouring out through slits in my skin
Ringing through our ears, can't ever win
i thought that this was a very emotional drain write, its an awesome poem, i enjoyed reading it all the way through. the title suits it completely and i loved how you said it was vampireish. keep writing!!!!
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nice description of blood, very dark and intense. great work.
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This poem is seriously ass kicking.
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Thanks guys!
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wow!
now that was intense. the darkness of it all makes it crazy cool lol. very awesome write. good luck
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Wow.That flowed like river. It was cute in a drak sort of way. If that makes sense...
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you have a way with words. this brings emotion to our life-force. very moving and deep.
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i love it it's so dark and morbid lol
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Very deep and dark, keeps you reading, another good one from you well done !
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Profound, BR, you give life to life's essential. Its as if you gave it a voice.
LL
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wow,thanks so much! lovely-LadyLavender
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