You hold
The spectrum of my heart,
And in your fingers
Gently coax out
Luminosities of colour
Your laughter
Breathes out melodies
That whisper onto glossy twists
Of canvas.
Glowing softly,
flourished beauty,
Under artists love and tender care
of brush
Please tell me what you think
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amazing. the imagery is so strong.. i absolutely love the lines "Your laughter/Breathes out melodies/That whisper onto glossy twists/Of canvas". i love the metaphor throughout the poem. great piece.
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Lovely
What a lovely and colorful metaphorical poem you've penned here. Such a pleasant delight to read and savor. I love how you've turned the vague abstractions of love and beauty into this skillfully portrayed poetic image of the first order. Thanks for sharing this chaming little treasure from the heart.
All the best,
David Michaels
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Oh what wonderfully colorful imagery that absolutely shines in this sweet piece! I can even see how my own sweet love has created a masterpiece of love such as you have crafted in here. Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Hetohke'e *
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Beautiful! i love the first stanza "Your fingers gently coax out..."
Really beautiful! X
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Liked the metaphor you have used throughout this poem to express how you feel about someone. Easy to read and understand, good flow and nice alliterstion.
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such a soft and tender write certainly deserves applauding, exelent work, very creative
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this was a good poem..very different from mose of the stuff that i have come across today but all in all a grea tpoem..your words were strong, powerful and beautiful..you are very talented..keep writting and good luck in the contest
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I think sensitive and imaginative are words I could use to describe this piece. I think "glossy twists / Of canvas" are my favourite lines, because you write about this person's laughter as if it is a tangible thing. Amazing word choice here.
Best of luck in the contest. Thanks for sharing.
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a very graceful and sensitive poem this picture has inspired you ... perfect in every way ...
maa
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Such a lovely poem, the images of paint and artist, canvas and color:
Your laughter
Breathes out melodies
That whisper
onto glossy twists
Of canvas
Glowing softly
Under artists love, care,
And brush
Very beautiful poem, good luck in the contest. -
Beautiful! I love the lines;
'that whisper
onto glossy twists
of canvas'
leaves such a whimsical image. Very nice poetry!
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Wow-
What images color this canvas
Beautiful piece You have penned my Friend and love the Journey You take the reader on...
with Artist's Flair~....
Loved it!!
Thank You for sharing Your Talent!!
Best wishes to You in the contest
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Beautiful
Wonderfull fluid write wo much said in so few words. Well Done.
*Go with God* my friend,
*f Valerie
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