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You've Got Some Splainin' To Do

Driving along, not a thought in my head
It’s a wonder I didn’t end up dead
Imagine my surprise when I realized
My car’s in the air! I can’t believe my eyes!
I drank one too many, now that’s for sure
But you know, this wasn’t in the brochure!
I never thought I’d end up like this
Things have really gone amiss.
Now thinking of last night, all the fun I had
Will it be worth it when I explain this to dad?

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  • Xxxxxxxxx
    April 9, 2007

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    Reminds me of a Simpsons episode when Homer & Marge got way fucked up plastered and homer was trying to think something and noticed he was upside down in a ditch
    so is this a true story ?


    • ChildeOfChaos
      April 9, 2007
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      Nope, not a true story, just something for a contest. You should check out the pic, it was hilarioius.


  • Old Fool
    March 13, 2007
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    I had to laugh after reading this.. Excellent !
    I am a dad, and have just taken my teenagers plus boyfriends to Amsterdam.. An Experience not to be missed... and we had a smoke too...
    So, explain to dad? Nah, he was with m... and understands...
    All my Love
    {o!-}

    • ChildeOfChaos
      March 14, 2007
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      My dad...would probably be pretty kewl. Sure he'd yell but he'd get over it. Just like he didn't freak when I was learning to drive and I sorta tried to make a turn going like 45mph and went right into a little ditch instead Mom is the one I'd probably have to worry about, lol. Thanks for the comment, much appreciated.


  • Naridill
    March 13, 2007

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    Great rhyming, pretty cool and simple poem. Yet good meaning. It seems serious at first yet fun in middle and serious at end again. I think its pretty cool.

    Gold stars for you,


  • lucy sky-diamond
    March 12, 2007
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    great rhyme, very well penned, with an excellent flow

    i love the way you have spingboarded it from the picture, you can see how it relates, but it is still origional in its own write

    great write, good luck in the contest


    • ChildeOfChaos
      March 12, 2007
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      Thanks! I'm glad you liked it That was a great picture to be inspired by


  • penman gold member
    March 10, 2007
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    Think hard

    Oh yeah, them explaining stories can be tough. Really is creative. Good luck in the contest.


    • ChildeOfChaos
      March 11, 2007
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      Thanks, I had fun with this one, but who wouldn't with a picture like the one for this contest?


  • Grey Mouser
    March 10, 2007

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    "LUCY! You got some 'splaining to do." LOL. Saw the title and couldn't help but remember Ricky saying that to her all the time. Well the trip and the fun sounded good, just the consequences may be somewhat stiff to deal with.
    Very good impression of the image. Thanks for entering into the contest.
    Be well and be blessed,

    Mouser


    • ChildeOfChaos
      March 10, 2007

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      Thanks, I could just imagine my father, hands on hips and face beat red screaming at me to explain myself

  • JacKerowac
    March 9, 2007
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    I loved it!!

    I have a daughter in high school, and I can imagine something like this in her head. Awesome!

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