My winter sun still shivers as it dawns
across my dream of silhouette in bronze,
as branches beckoning blue to spill utopia
in flowers blushed as pastel cornucopia.
And in this cold, I ache for wilder syllable
to bend in line, a darker poem, as chill, able
to freeze that place when night is iced ensemble
of vision shaped with vice to pound on anvil,
a sculpted want to carve as globule
etched in timid track to tear, a sob you'll
plant as lost inside my Heart's inferno,
burning bush to beast, tasting in turn, no
as season, slivered in the sound of shifting stomach,
where laugh is breeze to lift, in neon comic
dance in black as white, and move as penguin
building man to mock in face of silver head wind,
across his desert sigh of sultry wraith
in misplaced effort calling rock to bathe,
and feel in blindness, a pathway to absorb.
As step to step, he moves across his orb
in excavated sand of sifted food as cannibal,
aching with Imagination's drought, constrained in manacle
immobilizing finger, as wetter fact I taught her,
in Nature's womb of Spring's eternal daughter
dressed in pink to powder Petal's flamingo,
and fly in swills of Circle's clever lingo.
For Season's soul is not a true monopoly,
in love to bend as Willow's sweet monogamy
standing Meadow's trust as Morning's heroine,
but grace returning in simple wish, as fare to win
the earth in leaf, and blend in Pool's magenta
ripples, to sign as wave in weave of soulful mentor
apart from fear to taste, as Jungle's sovereign ninja.
But spirit safe, as secret not to injure.
Author notes
I fixed the issue with water...and so went with taught her...and I like it even better
A contest entry
- Mission: Difficult III by shewalksintomine.
1200 points, ended March 8, 2007, 6 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This was beautiful. Wonderfully done. And well deserving of being in the top.
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Good thing I'm such a slow judge
I agree with kabes that this is a great entry. You've done an exceptional job with the bank of words provided. Thanks for entering.
Please don't respond to this until after the contest should you choose to do so. I'm co-judging and would like your entry to remain anonymous. Thanks! --->pixxie<--- -
Now THAT'S what I'm talking about! To think, though, that I almost closed the contest last night. I didn't because the other judge didn't send me her list of winners. Had she, the contest would have been without this poem and would not have been better off.
I thank her and I thank you for this great write. Yours is one of just a handful that was well-written that also didn't seem like it had a difficult word bank to work with. Combine all of that with the fact that you used every word and it just makes it better.
The only gripe I had was that you used the word 'water' to rhyme with 'daughter', which was specifically asked of entrants NOT to do, as that word was in parentheses.
Please do not respond to this comment until after judging has ended, so that we can be fair and unbiased. Thanks for entering and good luck!
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