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A Tear Drop

I am only a teardrop,
but I am swimming in an ocean,
i am lost in confusion,
as I drown in your painful emotions.

I am the purity of your intention,
your inside reflection,
we all swim in oceans,
made of love and rejection.

You nurture me inside,
i am your hidden disguise,
you try to hide,
me from your eyes.

I am not a deception,
nor an enervation,
I am merely a slave,
of what your heart has engraved.

I am the ease of your soul,
the relieve of your suffering,
i am the answer,
to your inside questioning.

I am only a teardrop,
but I am swimming in an ocean,
i am lost in confusion,
as I drown in your painful emotions.

BY: Saima Aslam



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  • Stonecosta
    March 11, 2007

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    Wow, that's strong dedication. I really feel like I can relate to this, feeling such devotion to a person, and being strongly affected by their pain.
    I really like how well the imagery and meaning tie together. The metaphors are beautifully done
    I think the second to last paragraph,
    "I am the ease of your soul,
    the relieve of your suffering,
    i am the answer,
    to your inside questioning."
    ...kinda doesn't seem to fit the style of the rest of the poem, and is sorta, sudden, actually, but I think just some tweaking with the wording could fix that.
    Still, VERY beautiful poem!