Is the entire world coming down upon
My shoulders? Is it time to empty my
Inkbottle to throw all my writings away,
To never grab my pen again, no longer
To be the poet, for the end has come,
No more words just the peaceful winds
Caressing my face, the sun shining for
The last time within my soul, my heart
Beats within one last page, which blows
Across the sea of lost poets that have
Lost their way.
A contest entry
- here's to the losers by risewiththesmoke.
303 points, ended March 10, 2007, 16 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrite Phenomenon #4 by Ryno.
300 points, ended March 30, 2007, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrite Contest! (Show me your stuff) by BloodCrusted.
600 points, ended April 18, 2007, 97 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 1st Round: Anything you want......:D [[Closes in 1 hour!]] by xox-lankan-xox.
450 points, ended April 18, 2007, 171 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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wow, this blew me away. it is so short and powerful. the emotion that you have placed within the words is so overwhelming.beautiful write. very thought-provoking.
All the best
Hollow Eyes -
congrats on that gold. you deserve it! this reminds me of writers block and the feelings that come from it! a great way you have written this piece, the words and the flow.
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this is how i feel when teh writting is just not flowing for me^^
since i have had similar expirences, i could certainly see through your eyes. very nice job and good luck in my contest!
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Ahh, I like what the poem is saying, but I kinda get lost within the format.
It confuses me, which takes away from the content of the poem.
Yet, this poem was nicely phrased!
Good luck in the contest!
-System of Cyanide
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Hmm.. this has a really interesting format and structure... but it was actually quite well written and refreshing, different and enjoyable. Thank-you for entering prewrites, best wishes.
~Ryan~ -
This piece is so powerful and full of amazing emotions stirred up by this masterpiece...your pen is such an azwesome thing. Keep up the good work! Smiles, Terry
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hhhmmmm... not sure
i think it's ok and reflects your feelings toward this point in your life. you should really keep wrighting but try to add a little more self feeling and figurative language. those are my only sugestions and don't stop.
*mistertriple6*
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I really enjoyed this poem. Good work.
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wow, i had to read this several times because it was totally amazing. really, really nice job. good luck in the contest. whatever happens, keep writing...
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