Society is trying to push personalities into oblivion
Get rid of any seperate opinions
Peoples minds are in a void
They just dont think about what they want to avoid
They would rather be wrong and surrender
The one that stands up they say is the offender
They ignore if change doesnt come there will be catastrophe
Everyone will renounce thier blasphemy
Revenge will be sweet
To those who have done right..a treat
Reality is being cut
Without anyone to rebut
Like the tender viens of depression
People retreat into the tranquil recesses of thier mind
Rubbing everyone raw until they are red, no one left to be kind
Maybe one day people will wake up and relize
People need to pull the veil out from thier eyes
Author notes
Hey there...I'm 13.I used these words.
1. Oblivion
2. Void
3. Surrender
4. Catastrophe
5. Sweet
6. Cut
7. Veins
8. Tranquil
9. Blood
10. Red
Didnt mean for it to seem to dark..but yet i wanted a hint of reality to shine through
A contest entry
- FOR 13 & UNDER ONLY -- A WORDBANK FOR YOU !! by Kiddie Contests.
400 points, ended March 15, 2007, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Tell Me How It Is! by Luna Darling.
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Comments
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Good job and it had a lot to say. Good use of the word bank yes society does try to quiet the voices, everyone deserves to be heard. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
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Cool!
Cool! I see nothing wrong with it. Keep writing and don't let those nasty rumors or mean people get you down! Don't believe it unless you see it, girl! (People are JEALOUS of you winning everything, playing well and being a good girl! Don't let that hurt you!) -
Wowwy
awesome poem i didn't see anything wrong with it
*note: this is where i tell you if something is wrong but nothing is wrong*
Well good luck in the contest and i hope you get i trophy for this wonderful poem
Your fellow contestant,
Sammi
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Wowowwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww this is simply superb!!! The words have been put in place beautifully... The hint of reality really shone through it... For your age, this is amazingg workk!!
"People retreat into the tranquil recesses of thier mind
Rubbing everyone raw until they are red, no one left to be kind
Maybe one day people will wake up and relize
People need to pull the veil out from thier eyes"
This is great! Keep up the fantabulous work and keep penning such wonderful beautiesZz.
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