“Daddy, you promised!”
Jojo, age five, cries
He looks at her with a slight frown,
But gives in to her pleading eyes,
And with one push, he’s out the door
To catch her butterflies
They could make each other smile
Because they were best friends
He liked to watch her run in the wind
She liked to play pretend
“Daddy, do you promise?” she asks him
“To love me ’till the end?”
“Yes, baby, I promise,” he whispers
“Yes, yes, and yes again.”
“Daddy, you promised!” Jojo wails
“To dance with me today!”
He is too tired all the time,
His meds get in the way
“I’m sorry baby,” he murmurs
Then closes his eyes to pray
The doctors told him it’s coming soon
He doesn’t have too long
Jojo doesn’t understand
What she is doing wrong
“Baby, please, don’t be mad,” he pleads
"I need you to be strong.”
The disease captured him quickly
Soon he was forced to stay in bed
His body ached all over
His eyes were rimmed in red
Jojo wants to know why
There’s no hair upon his head
Even though he has to lay down,
He still could make her smile
He holds her to his bruising skin
And thanks God for his child
Maybe the angels would feel pity
And let him stay a while
Now he can’t move at all
For he is much too weak
He tells her to come over
As tears fall from his cheeks
“Baby, I am with you always,
Even as I sleep.”
She is afraid this is the one promise
He won’t be able to keep
“Daddy, do you promise?” she asks him
“To love me ’till the end?”
“Yes, baby, I promise,” he whispers
“Yes, yes, and yes again.”
A contest entry
- Tell me a Story by TabbyCat.
750 points, ended April 2, 2008, 44 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Beautiful....stunningly so.
This was an incredibly moving poem, written so well....great flow, rhyme was flawless. Congrats on the gold...it was absolutly deserved.
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Wow...I'm crying right now! That was so beautiful and sad and sweet. What a tender and loving write. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
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beautiful..This was very very nicely written. the story laid out so well, the flow was nice the tempo was great. All in all this was a wonderful read Great job.
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Excellent story, nice rhyming and flow. Well told, and capturing the anxiety and love on both sides.
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I thought this was an absolutely incredible poem.What emotion and heartfelt though thas gaone into this piece.Wonderful job.
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So sad and yet so beautiful
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wow this is really moving. really sad...reminds me so much of my grandfather that died from cancer. really great job and good luck!
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This poem is so sad...and the innocent tone makes it even more heartbreaking...best of luck in the contest.
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The childhood innocence is what gives this poem such a powerful meaning. It brought tears to my eyes and you are a billiant writer.
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Oh...this is so very sad. Just the type of poem I was hoping for. Thank you for entering my contest...I was moved.
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This was so sad! *sniffles* It is one of the greatest poems ever! It's beautiful! It's amazing! It's wonderful! I love how it rhymes and makes perfect sense. It's so sad!!!! I love it sooo much!
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aw this is sad..
i like how you were being repetative, yet it was still a story. wow i definety can NOT explain things today.
ilikeitthoe
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Beautiful write. Heartfelt!
It struck a cord in me when reading. WEll written -
Wow. Very powerful words in this! And also sooo sad. But a verrry well written piece! You are an amazing writer! I'm so jealous! haha but also there was a very good flow to this poem. Good beat! lol I know this isn't a song but still verrrrrrry awesome/amazing/terrific/etc POEM! LOVE IT!!!
xoxoxox
Muwah!
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awwwwwwwwww.
this is so sad! but goooood. i wanna cry now. :'(
i love the feeling of the rhyming in this...it just sounds cool lol, it flows well.
love it
<3
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