your hat tipped
too far
it fell
...too bad its not raining
i'm in the mood
to see you ruined
or at least,
some little part
of you
[us]
Please tell me what you think
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Oh. I really like this one. The shortness made it feel rather intense. And it's bitter, too! Yay for bitter!
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nice
I really like this one, it rocks -
You are the kind of poet I love settling back with...I never know what to expect from your poetry. You have a quirky, interesting, wonderfully unique style, and I usually find myself smiling like crazy after reading something of yours. Bravo, and here's to you
Love, Lane
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Aw, Lane, you give the best comments. <33
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The first time, I thought I should read it again, without half-watching my crime show.
Second time, I had to read it again, simply because I loved it.
Third time...
speechless.
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You write very smart poetry, girl!
I am so perplexed by you and my other daughter, AbusedFlower, and how you two make such fabulously arranged poetry!
I would like to take lessons from you two. 
This poem is marvelous! 
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OMFG! OMFG! OMFG! OMFG! OMFG! Shirley, you really hit the big one on my scale with this one. Seriously. I have no clue why, but you struck a cord with this here work of art.
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yayness, a reaction like that makes me victory dance lol! XD
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I really like this. Simply yet meaningful. This is the type of poem I am in the mood for.
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lol, we're all in odd moods tonight, its going around lately :s
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29 LETTERS, not WORDS ... see, it's not easy...
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lol, i know i realized that, and removed it- lol, i'm such a ditz sometimes..
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