Your instant gratification
Tainting my being
Like venom from a snake
Paralyzing
Gradually
Taking it's time to poison
Infecting me
Slowly sealing my fate
External scars
Visible
Yet they heal with time
The Invisible
Internal wounds
Never fade
My soul cries
For freedom
Tears for whom
I could have been.
In a list
A contest entry
- For All Rape Survivors by ElisaRose.
600 points, ended March 17, 2007, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Options-mostly a sad despairing contest-Options by lover and hater.
300 points, ended September 28, 2007, 14 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - round contest #1 by serenity silvermoon.
600 points, ended March 26, 2008, 25 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Congrats on all the shinys!
A wonderfully penned piece. I love the descriptions you have used. Awesome. All the best in the contest with it
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well done congradulations on the silver, keep up the great work and thanks for your entry
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this was so beautiful you did an amazing job...please put the option you chose though for this is your only warning...i dont want to DQ you...thank you for entering and good luck in the contest!!
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Very good, not good that it is written though because of course that means.... well you now what it means any way. Great gob. real emotional. Oh and of course thanks for entering my contest
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very nice
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This was written very well. Good luck!
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Unthinkable things
Very real sentiment, no way to even begin to identify with the struggle of recovery after such a thing. Powerfully done, well written. A shame it should need to be written at all.
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I'm speechless at this one!
Wow, you have penned an incredibly powerful piece here.
Those last 2 lines really touched deep.
Best of luck with this in the contest
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Oh No
I'm so sorry, Your poem broke my heart. I'm a man but I can't imagine how any man could hurt another human being like that. It makes me sick. It enrages me!
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Wow...this is so powerful and tragic. It brings up so many emotions in me sadness, fear, anger, hate. I got chills, the last four lines.."My soul cries For freedom, Tears for whom I could have been."...I imagine anyone who has ever been in this situation can relate to this. Wonderful write!! Bravo!!
Whyitt U xxx
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I agree, this is very powerful. I felt it deep in my gut, it packs such a punch but, at the same time, it's so calm. Almost as if you accept the death of your innocence, which is so heartbreaking. I can remember when I finally came to accept that the girl I used to be was gone, I was so lost but I dug deeper within myself. I pulled out my strength and determination and fought for who I was and, I guess, am to become.
Very powerful indeed,
Elisa
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WOW !
This is awesome. I don't know what else to say. I was unfortunate enough to be married to someone who thought it was ok to force himself on me just because we were married. Of course he is my ex now. Great write
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OMG!!!!!
Very powerful!!
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