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my chance

i really don't...but how could you break up with me to go out with her?
does she or will she care more about you than I did or could?
you didn't give me the chance to get to you...why did you lie?
how could you just cast me aside?
i feel like you just shot me with a bow and arrow through my brain so i couldn't feel anymore...
except that i still love you and have already forgiven you for what you did to me...
i don't care what you do to me anymore...
i'm now to the point of worthlessness...
forget me,hate me,drive me deeper into insanity, the only thing you could possibly do to hurt me more is never give my chance...
it was like we were playing a game...
you cheated and someone else took my turn...
and now i'm the child,striped of dignity and striken with grief, sitting in the corner
with her head between her knees,crying because she didn't get her turn to play the game...
you were the only one i said "i love you" to and ment it...
i ment with all my heart...far as i know you still have my key...
do you even want it? don't give it back,just in case you change your mind and give me my chance...
just like the game, what you did was unfair...I'm not that child now...
i've cried and drawn my bloody lines across my secret hiding place's walls...
proclaiming my fovever love for you...
you held together my fears and doubts...i miss you my love...
i will not force you...i will not plaugue you...but why her? what about her is better than me?
consider what i've told you i would do for you...
would she do that?
please talk to me love...
i miss you and i worry about you...
you broke me...
shattered on the floor...
how can i pick myself up?
do you regret anthing you did?
i still want to talk to you...
don't leave me all alone in the darkness of your
shadow...

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"Sorry, but I'm not going to be used by you any more."

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  • YesterdaysDreams
    June 28, 2007

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    There were some misspelled words in this I would suggest editing it for that but otherwise ... again all raw emotion that just leaves the reader breathless and feeling your pain. For me the real genuis in writing poetry is that one ability. To cause a reader to cry, laugh alongside the writer. awesome... completely awesome


    don't leave me all alone in the darkness of your
    shadow...

    just ... that line in itself would make any warm blooded human being tear up


  • Anfractuous
    June 14, 2007
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    ..

    You were never....."used".....


  • Ignis Corpus
    June 10, 2007

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    please talk to me love...
    i miss you and i worry about you...
    you broke me...
    shattered on the floor...
    how can i pick myself up?
    good poem and good job i liked those lines they jumped out to me, good job keep up the good work and good luck in my contest

  • Holynite
    June 2, 2007
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    wow... powerful words.......im so sorrry

  • Chaos666
    March 7, 2007

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    omg dat really touched my heart. its so beautiful and i can tell it came from your heart. keep your head up and keep up the good writing.
    -sly

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