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Could I?

Image by Tommy Edwards

 

 

 

Could I....softly....guiding

Would you....sensuously...sliding

Should you....feverishly....desiring

Let me....gently....licking

Should you...openly....trusting

Would you....slowly.....soaring

Could I.....quietly....enjoying

 

 

Running my fingers over your body

Tingling from head to feet

Enjoying your soft sensual skin

Coming alive with passions heat

 

 

Kissing your succulent red lips

Tasting you for the first time

Fighting to take it slow

Amazing that you are mine

 

 

Touching your swollen breast

Caressing my beautiful maiden

Listening as you softly moan

Watching your nipples harden

 

 

Reaching around from behind

Sliding my hand betwixt your thigh’s

Pealing back pink folds

Finding that spot that elicits sigh’s

 

 

Climbing up through the clouds

Drinking in your sweet nectar

Riding on a raging tidal wave

Worshiping at your orgasmic altar

 

 

Could I....softly....guiding

Would you....sensuously...sliding

Should you....feverishly....desiring

Let me....gently....licking

Should you...openly....trusting

Would you....slowly.....soaring

Could I.....quietly....enjoying...

 

 

 

 

Author notes

The picture is from http://www.tommyedwards.com/portrait_photography.html an excellent artist.

I wrote this for a dear friend of mine. If you would like to hear it spoken you may download it from http://www.flipdrive.com/file/478ea892d046025b7b7d4b1a49a0.wav

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  • tarcus
    July 10, 2008

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    Coulda shoulda woulda are the last words of a fool, can't remember who sang it but it was quite a catchy tune.
    A bit like this.


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    March 1, 2008

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    Sexy write, I shouldn't have read it so early, should have saved it for later.... Really good, it's not tacky at all, which is what I find so much of in the erotica on this site. Thank you so much for entering the contest, good luck.

    ♥
    whisper

  • mama-drama
    March 12, 2007

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    This is so amazing! Erotic and completely sensual. I like the smoothness in the words. You describe it so well, almost the whole difference between love making and having sex. Amazing.


  • MrsPepper
    March 12, 2007
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    Most beautiful and sexy

    This is the sexiest thing I think I've ever read...I am really glad I read it


  • x CheepPurfume
    March 11, 2007

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    Oh dear! wowow. This was so deep and is it hot in here? I think I need a shower. hahah. Just kidding. but this was such a wonderful write! This was full of passion and beauty. Amazing job. Keep up the great work!

    Tori


  • swanridur
    March 9, 2007

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    Sensual

    I love the first and last stanza reading down as well as across 'could I would you should you let me' Yes I definately think so! It flows beautifully, great erotic write. Thank you SR


  • MessedupMarionette
    March 8, 2007

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    Wow--this is really amazing... It's very sensual without making the reader blush. It's great! I love it. The only thing I would change would be the middle words in the last stanza--to show development rather then repetition. But it's brilliant! Good luck in the contest.


  • immortalbeloved16
    March 8, 2007
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    Very Passionate

    I love this, it almost made me wet . The picture goes great with this piece. Keep up the good work. I could see how erotic it was just by listening.


  • March 7, 2007
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    Beautifully written, I could feel the desire the heat the passio.


  • SorrowWithoutWords
    March 7, 2007

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    oh my goodness! this is quite wonderful! The title is perfect. there are no corrections that i would suggest you make. the repitition stanza is wonderfully erotic and warms the body from the inside out alerting every sense with only words. the other stanzas are perfectly rhymed and keep a timed meter to them. awesomely executed my friend. i salute you for what i could never do...i stand in your shadow.
    ~Sorrow~

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