I kiss
Your lips so soft
Delicate bubbles burst
On satin skin, shimmering dew
Spread light and thin, breath softly escaping
The eye of heaven shines upon
Lustrous gold complexion
So tenderly
I kiss
A contest entry
- RICTAMETERS!!!!!!!! by sunny day.
1750 points, ended March 20, 2007, 29 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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so, now i know what this form is. until i had no clue. you have written a very good exanple for me to see for the first time. thank you for sharing this with me. viyanna rosemarie
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Very romantic. Well done. Best of luck.
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A wonderful rictameter you have penned for the contest. It is filled with lovely imagery and a kiss so magical. Very elegant verbiage that made this one. Thank you for entering and best wishes in the contest.
Joyce
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such a sensuous greeting you have penned here, to use form poetry and still come up with something so inviting and expressive of the love you hold is quite amazing, well done, Broad
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This is lovely. Your rictameter is well constructed and flows with lovely imagery. You never cease to amaze me. Good luck in the contest my friend.
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amazing
this is great. The imagery is amazing here, and i actually can imagine kissing someones lips after reading this poem. Keep up the great writting.
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I have said it before You have a wonderful way with your words of love, emotions and feelings Just another fine example of that talent Good luck in the contest
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I loved the picture of "the eye of heaven shining upon" your loved one. It comments upon the spirituality of love. I liked it.
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This poem describes a perfect kiss. You captured so much emotion in these few lines. Thank you for entering this contest.
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lovely write...
delicate bubbles burst
on satin skin,shimmering dew
those were my favorite lines...beautiful
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