Oh say can you see
By the dawn’s early light
Your people are dying
Too willing to fight
Oh say can you see
That these people, right here
The people of your country
Are living in fear?
Oh I know you can hear
And I know you can see
Your people are dying
And crying, and trying
To cope
Trying to keep up hope
With a star-spangled sky where the roof used to be
Oh I know you have seen
And you just can’t ignore
Someone should be ending
This terrible war.
If not you, then who?
That’s what you’re there for.
The bombs bursting in air
Only prove what we knew
Across shining seas
The bloodshed’s on you
America the Beautiful
Will be no longer
If things do not change
If we do not get stronger.
But to achieve this
We all must unite
Against war and poverty and terrorism and fright
And famine and sickness and wrongs of all kind.
With an eye for an eye
All the world will be blind.
A contest entry
- The truth is hidden under the rug by XxAlishaxBentleyxX.
450 points, ended March 10, 2007, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Well said. I am sure many would agree and not just Americans either.
Let's see what happens next!
jjj
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oh my goodness. this is real poetry. It is amazing. Best thing I have read in a while. Basically took my breath away. I love how you used saying and other songs in it. Ahh, for real this is great.. I am going to go read other stuff that you wrote now. haha. I love this.I would give you more than three aplause if I could!
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thank you so much!!
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Awusome i loved it
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Awesomeness. Sounds like it could make a pretty great song even. Fantastic job on this. I especially like the lines "Your people are dying
And crying, and trying
To cope
Trying to keep up hope
With a star-spangled sky where the roof used to be"
And the last two lines, "With an eye for an eye, all the world will be blind". Perfect ending. Good luck!
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Hey, This is Alisha. I'm the judge for this contest.
I would like to say. WOAH! Great job. I loved it. I like how you take a song that should be honoring our country and tell how unhonorable it is because of everything Bush has done. This was really good!
Good job
Good luck
- Lisha Dawn
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