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-+- Sweet Dreams are Made of This -+-

 

Watchers wait for slumber to set in,  patiently
as skies shape shift in preparation.
Heaviness on chest mistaken for heartburn
while particles penetrate whites of eyes.

Ache ignored,  weather assumed responsibility
yet foundation moves silently with agenda.
Needle pricks numbed by saliva saturation
under exposed fragile flesh on feet.

Infection makes home where heart lives,
buried next to vein filled with essence.
Sadness~ confused state the culprit,
reality blinds mind of past.

Skin sheds tension stress related,
feeds mites till they engorge and vomit.
Hair follicles cannot appease them anymore~
tiny burrows made,  mapped on body.

Sleep and astral travel with light luggage
but know dead play games of Life.
Noise trapped,  walls amplify screams
that pierce drums in ears cockroaches seek.

They hiss,  squirt excrement down open mouths
when a yawn beckons in middle of night.
Eight legs spin webs to capture hot breath,
lay eggs to capture bile stomach contents.

Fear does not compute nor does Help Me,
catatonic playground for Soul searching.
Nightmares regurgitate twenty four seven,
at work,  at home and in desired peaceful meditation.

Fingers opened Pandora’s Box to secrets surfaced
with paranoia of defeat on string,  fish hooks imbedded.
Maggots squirm and watch intestines writhe,
bait and switch under contaminated bath water~shower.

Stalker behind back,  invisible to others view
when alone is assumed,  company draws near.
Tuck memories in bed,  kiss goodnight paradise
in a molded box self sealed,
hole on top for cracked straw to breathe.




Sweet Dreams are Made of This ]


  

 

Author notes

Req: Flummox


Note: This is not one of my normal Dark pieces but the Hostesses asked for something to raise the hair follicles...
So I had to look beyond and write something twisted with words-inspiration from outside forces...

Enjoy the music while You read!
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gr3Cpy7Nfyk

Requirements:
...the catch it you have to leave us shivering.
Give us the creeps, spook us and give us the willies.
That is not a simple task as niether B Chandler
nor myself are easily creeped out or spooked.
So yes you do have your work cut out
for you in this round.

Only the write that goes the deepest and darks will
place in the top six and move onto the finals.
15-40 Lines Max...


A contest entry

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Comments

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  • Ninth-Poet
    June 19, 2007
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    Creatively Refreshing To See

    This piece was creatively different for a piece of dark literature. Throughout the ppiece I felt being spiked and bleeding from the constants of imagery that was imprinting my brain.

    What was your driving inspiration for your masterpiece of creative darkness


    -Keep the ink flowing!
    -Good luck in the contest
    -Sage of the east


  • Melodies
    June 13, 2007
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    Awestruck! OH my GOSH, Desire... you rock the dark world here!


  • On Frail Wings.
    May 23, 2007
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    this is really good. good luck in the contes


  • penman gold member
    March 15, 2007
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    Excellent


  • Celticmoon
    March 13, 2007

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    Certainly you have taken a different route in penning this piece of darkness. Your words have brought forth unique images that do stir the mind, however nothing that would cause a shiver to linger about. This piece was an enjoyable read over all and the different approach appreciated. Thank for entering and good luck!


  • B Chandler
    March 12, 2007

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    Having to multitask can either work in favor for the effects or not. In this case , I'd say it was 50/50. Nevertheless this was a good read and the images were conveyed . good luck and keep penning


  • lovelustre
    March 7, 2007

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    Lots of excellent shivering, so much so I did not finish, but skipped to the end...not in the right mood at the moment, though it has all the signs of an excellent piece, from a grand poetess!


    • Desire gold member
      March 7, 2007
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      They asked for Dark...actually something to remember...
      so I thought to leave a little
      ...Normally I am pretty tame
      You are too adorable!!!


  • Deceits Tears silver member
    March 7, 2007
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    Wow this was amazing .

    • Desire gold member
      March 7, 2007

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      You are too sweet! Thank You for stopping by
      So Appreciate Your visit...
      I'll be heading Your way to inhale Your Masterpieces

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