You patronized me,
I was lost at sea.
I marvel at the comlexity,
of what you call humanity.
"Do as I say not as I do."
So laws don't apply to you?
Tell me if I'm wrong, this is all new
But lieing shouldn't defeat what is true!
I hate this twisted place,
Where innocence is just a waste.
I live for that untanted taste,
of life beyond this void of space.
Though others change to suit,
I can't forget, the point is moot.
When you die, you'll lose your loot,
But I will take another route.
For truth I keep, it should prevail.
Innocence I protect, I will not fail.
One day I will go past the ghostly veil.
Then I'll taste the victory of leaving this hell.
Author notes
This is about how I see parts of the world. I just wish it would get better.
A contest entry
- Hate Me, Kill Me by thorlorn thanatos.
380 points, ended March 30, 2007, 102 entries
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500 points, ended June 7, 2008, 54 entries
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Comments
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You have expressed your feelings very well.and the poem is very well written.
The flow is very smoothe and the rhyme is realy good
dosen't seemed forced at all.
Thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest. -
It's a good write. Remember not everything has to rhyme.
This reminds me of lyrics by Pink. You clearly show alot of passion for your inspiration. Be that good or bad.
Good luck in the contest
Ryan
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