Its humid and sticky here
As i look out across the desert
In the distance I hear gunfire
Another lost soul I fear
Friends and foe alike
Their eyes swelled and squinting
In the dust ladden sunlight
All wishing an end was near
Thoughts often carry back
to our distant land
of our friends and family
all wishing we were there
Nights are lonely
And desolate here
Minds playing tricks
As we stare into the darkness
All wishing it was daylight again
When the dawn crested the horrizon
The distant sounds grew near
Louder and louder they began to grow
There was laughter and joy
As eyes filled with tears
I looked around wondering
What all the fuss was about
When I glimpsed out the corner of an eye
I knew then what bestowed us all
The progression of white trucks drew near
Our American RED CROSS was finally here
A contest entry
- March New Member's Contest by AP Greeters.
600 points, ended April 6, 2007, 51 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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The ending of your poem gave me the feel of jubilation that one must feel at the moment of rescue. Thanks for sharing your poem with us and best of luck in the contest.
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The ending gave me an overwhelming sense of joy that the speaker seemed to be experiencing. Simple, but the emotions were good and I thought it made for a great entry into our contest. Thanks for sharing
--Tim -
Thank you for entering.
Good imagery here, I can actually feel myself in the situation you describe here. The title you have chosen is an excellent one for this particular poem, the last line brings the whole piece to a good conclusion tying in nicely with your title.
Well done and thank you for entering
~Katie~
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Amazingly Natural Flow of words
tell us of the war, pain, loss, hope, and the blessing recieved. Thank God for the Red Cross and many have felt just like you did. War can be hell on earth, but combat is totally wisked for all. You showed us yet another side of the war.....Great writing, keep them coming!...ennovy
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Very nice. A great job with your piece. I enjoyed the read. Thank you for entering. Best to you in the contest. :fSam
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Wonderfully penned and in such tragic context. But of course the Red Cross always tread where others fear to go.
Welcome to the site and thank you for this excellent entry
Gaylene
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a thought-provoking piece. We all have an opinion of the war[s], but how often do we stop to think about the peripheral players, the relief workers...well done
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Thanks for your entry
Wow, I can only imagine the affect of seeing the Red Cross comming after having been living in such circumstances. This brings a tear to my eye. Just thinking about it. Your imagery is heart breaking yet out of it shines a ray of hope that is the Red and White of the Red Cross. Thanks for sharing.
Good luck in the contest and welcome to allpoetry. I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God bless
Tammy -
Thanks for entering
You have painted a desolute picture of a land I can say gladly I have never seen. I think the Red Cross is often like the sunrise, always a welcome part of everyday life.
Let the ink flow and your fingers dance
Rosemary -
Good
I like this a lot
I would have liked some Authors Comments
to give the poem perspective and place the events
None the less, I like the words you made
Rick
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Thanks for the entry and welcome to the site!
That would be a very welcome sight in that situation, well… and any situation for that matter, I love the imagery in this piece. Nice work
Thank you very much for taking the time to write for and enter our contest. Best wishes and welcome to AllpoetryDove
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Thank You Kindly
I would like to thank you for your imput on my poem i was browsing the site when i came across the newcomers section i wish i had more time to put into the poem it took just a couple minutes to put it together .i wanted to enter just to see the out come of it this is a wonderful site here and i thank you again for your imput its always great to hear what someone else might think of your writing wether it but good or bad input its all great helps us to evolve in our creativity as a writer
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