I'll always love you, my red rose, my true love
When you cast me aside like a worthless banknote
I went home and a tear trickled down my toughened cheek
An involuntary, lonely tear
As i felt sadness touch my loving red heart
Another tear gushed from my left eye
Then i broke down into a deepening sob
I'm a tough guy - i don't cry
That windy November night i did
Hugging my pillow, crying loudly, isolated
I wail at one solitary point
As you steal my downcast heart forever
My soul cries but is never heard
I've never felt so alone in all my life
The night you hurt me, a touch to deeply
The moment you broke my heart in two
A contest entry
- ~~CRY,CRY, CRY~~ by Sweetangelgrace.
470 points, ended March 13, 2007, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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WOW~! This says it all and the person who wrote it!
This poem touched me in the deepest part of my soul.
as a female, i used to cry at the drop of bad feelings. Real man will cry too.
It's okay to cry, aint no shame in it. As a matter of fact, It is good to cry as it helps to free the tension that has built up in you. Crying does not mean that you start wailing like a little child though, this goes for both Men and Women.
Good luck in your life and thanks for entering my contest!
~~GRACE~~ -
Oh this is a very touching poem. Very good imagery!
My oldest brother would give his heart away too easily and find it broken over and over again.
I remember watching him fight back tears, and hearing his say these same words
"I'm a tough guy - i don't cry"
I think the words you've used, the story you've told in your poem is very honest of both genders feelings when their heart is broken.
Good poem!
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