Calloused and rough
Like abused hands overworked and tough
Cracked floorboards robed in splinters
Dry and parched
Like wandering through hot desert sand
Fissured deep in want of quenching waters
Dirty and bruised
Like white silk stained with dark mud
Delicate pieces trodden, harmed and deformed
Is this my shaking heart?
Can this be my battered soul?
Is this really the way I want to be?
With gentle hands my Savior
You pick up the last remaining pieces of myself
Smooth and soft
Like a rock after the rain
Velvety like a new blossom
Wet and saturated
Like a stream filling up
Yearning crevices filled to satisfy
Clean and healed
Like a pure and honest promise
Tears after forgiveness
God, you still my quaking heart
Lord, you repair my crumbling soul
I am no longer devoid, I am filled with You
You complete me, You redeem me
You sustain me
Author notes
God has done so much for me. Sometimes its hard to express what I feel.
But this is what I managed to get out.
A contest entry
- Give me emotion by LaLaLie.
360 points, ended April 14, 2007, 116 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wow, I did not expect this to be a poem about God. The stanza set-up reminds me of a poem I wrote a while ago, called My Abyss, from one of my darker phases. I really liked the beginning the most, and thought the flow went pretty well. Great job and good luck in the contest!
Nikki
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I like the ending stanza although I'm not the most "spiritual" person in the world, but I could feel that deep connection you had with God. Nice and simple way to put your emotions into words.
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Thanks for entering and Good luck.
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I really like the stanzas where you define and then state more visually!
"Calloused and rough
Like abused hands overworked and tough
Cracked floorboards robed in splinters", is my favorite part of the poem.
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A wonderful inspiration, evident in this tribute. The flow and imagery are all well done. Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors.
Hetohke'e * 
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simply beautiful
The second half of the amazing poem had me near tears. I love the way you defined abstract emotions like love and forgiveness with examples of nature "soft and smooth like a rock after the rain, wet and saturated like a stream filling up"
beautiful and brilliant!
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Wow, With this peice I can see how much faith you truthfully hold within you. And I must say its a priceless amount. amazing job, I love this peice.
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This was brilliant. You have strong faith and its wonderful to see that. You come across as someone who was a little lost before but has found God. I am glad that you have found your strength and that you have found your saviour. Keep on living and loving.
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Interesting with a tint of lime
This was a wonderful poem that held me, specifically "You pick up the last remaining pieces of myself" once I figured out you were speaking about yourself. I was thrown a little offguard by the entry of God into the poem, but it makes it all the more meaningful, great job
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