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So it is done...

So it is done

I lie awake, thinking of you
Angels sing with praise
Demons flutter on through
Heaven and Hell clash within
Its my metaphor for you

So it is done

I thought you were it
The one I could change
Nothing more that a fundamentalist
Playing at your own game
And I didn't even see it

So it is done

You wonder why I was crying?
You wonder why I screamed?
You just didn't care
You just sailed away
Away on through the night

So it is done

Since you don't care
Why should I?
My angels are leaving me
Nothing but glowing wings behind
And their grace hath gone with them

So it is done

Even the evil, that spreads from within
Will soon leave me
Hollow, hollow, hohlraum, this feeling inside
Will death desert me too?
We shall then see

So it is done

The choice to take ones life
Oh, how sweet a price
It seems you have won
Your dark victory has passed
Because I will soon be dead

So it is done

Go on to your new life
Leave this one behind
When you walked out of here
You took my spirit with you
And I am nothing more

So it is done

And now I am nothing
A shell of what I once was
Thank you for caring
Showing me love
Sarcastically, I love you

I love you, you bastard

So it is done

I am now dead
I see you feigning mourn
Show some pride you worthless dog
I am dead, and it's all your fault
Don't come looking for me - this love is silent...

... and dead!

And so it is done!

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  • Ilma
    July 16, 2007

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    I really liked it, especially the last stanza, it was very well done, and I think putting 'and so it is don'e was very effective and added to the emotion of the poem, well done and best of luck


  • Blood13Rayne
    March 12, 2007
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    wow!

    its very dark,a dn those are the poems i lvoe personally. try not putting "So it is done" so many times. i think putting it after eveyr other stanza instead of every stanza would have amde it flow alot better. but veyr good.


  • QueenofTomorrow
    March 7, 2007

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    hm...rather dark...would this happen to be about what i think this is about? if it is, then dont be so down cuz you still have me and kayla.^_^ we love you...and that b.watt hair ^_^